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Old 06-22-2007, 09:53 AM   #1 (permalink)
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"like a pair of shoes"

i just wanna chill in my room
with nobody but me and you
with messy hair in our underwear
i wanna stay in bed for good

well turn off both of our phones
lay down relaxing our bones
close our eyes and pretend
were in the carribean

we can sit and watch cartoons
with scooby doo and the crew
we can paint a picture in two
ill do anything with you

well turn of both of our phones
lay down relaxing our bones
close our eyes and pretend
were back in austin

baby baby i love you
we go together like a pair of shoes
your my better half i know its true
i dont care i dont care

- song i wrote that was inspired by many-a-acid trips with a girl. the guitar lick is a beachy blues like tone using D - F#min7th - Emin7th verse, Bmin7th - Emin7th - F#min7th chorus, and a catchy slap and slide Emin7th - F#min7th bridge. there is some finger picking in between the chords but that gives you a general idea.
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Old 06-22-2007, 07:13 PM   #2 (permalink)
you are freakin out, man
 
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not bad man, mostly good, i like the chill, relaxed sort of feel. Some words do sorta throw off the flow though, like the usage of the word austin, which doesn't really rhyme with pretend. Besides that, and some less than spectacular similes (like a pair of shoes) its pretty sweet. i'm interested in hearing the finished product... oh, and if you get the time, could you take a look at my song sunraze... just lookin for opinions and stuff
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