sleepy jack

I notice this problem so much, and I honestly think if people aren't going to rhyme creatively then shouldn't rhyme at all. Rhyming sounds good, but you can do things with it and it would sound better because it doesn't look so bad. You can rely on syllables too. Use a different rhyming scheme instead of aabb, even abab would be better. Though both are pretty lame, play around with it and do like abcabcdd or something.

I mean in buckley's grace he goes abbcdefgee.

And she weeps on my arm
Walking to the bright lights in sorrow
Oh drink a bit of wine we both might go tomorrow
Oh my love
And the rain is falling and I believe
My time has come
It reminds me of the pain
I might leave
Leave behind

Thats so much better then.

And she weeps on my arm,
Walking in the bright lights of harm,.
Oh we might go out tomorrow,
My love never feel sorrow,
And I believe the falling of the rain
It reminds me of pain,
I might leave.
I might leave.

He rhymes line five with ten, and its way more interesting them rhyming line one with three and two with four and about the syllables.

Scheme:
Roses burn kindle and fall,
But I knew we would live through all.

Without a scheme:
Roses burn, kindle and fall.
But I knew we would live like faith.

It sounds just as good because they both have the same amount of syllables. Its annoying because everyone seems to use lame variants on A and B and occasionally they throw in a C. People need to invent their own schemes or use internal rhyming or something. Theres also like half rhymes, like weed/me, both have the ee sound, but me doesn't have a d at the end.

Like,

They took you apart and left you to feel pain,
Oh but please don't think you're the one to blame.

ain and ame work just as well, and internal rhyming is cool to,

don't you see the frozen bee?
it lays in the frost every day.

See/Bee, Lays/Day both work, and its more surprising line to line. I just think people need to start playing with techniques I basically instantly dismiss a song as soon as I read the first verse is "Can't you see, that you really hurt me, and every night cry, cause im wondering why." It takes away from the piece this probably didn't make any sense.

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Voice_of_the_Soul12,13,01

That helped me understand rhyming schemes so much better. Thanks.

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But I can't help myself
When I feel the vibe
And taste a memory
Of a time in life
When years seemed to stand still