emoo (goth, songs)

xemoxyox623 · 04-18-2007, 07:37 PM

ok so a few months ago i got real angry at something. and i wrote this little song and im quite proud of it, if i do say so myself. anyone else's opinions?

We sit and think,
As we wipe dry.
All the tears that we cry.

I'm on the brink,
The edge of insanity.
Wondering what do I see in this vanity?

I lay here burning in my mentality

Cut, stab
Watch them bleed.
You'll not suffer
For this sinful deed.

Put them through their sorrows
For they would grieve in the end
Take the broken from the heart
Try to find a way to mend.

You end the pain,
Break the streak
As they become bleak.

In their vein,
The cold, it begins to pulse.
You watch as they convulse.

It finally hits, the true reality.

Cut, stab
Watch them bleed.
You'll not suffer
For this sinful deed.

Put them through their sorrows
For they would grieve in the end
Take the broken from the heart
Try to find a way to mend.

They're finally dead,
They're bleeding the red.
Enough was said.
As you're tears were shed.

thanks
gitrshredr

sleepy jack · 04-18-2007, 09:01 PM

I have an idea, it begins with s and ends in uicide.

just for kicks · 04-18-2007, 09:04 PM

really depressing, wish i hadnt read that

zak · 04-18-2007, 09:35 PM

I agree, i'm kinda down now. /cuts self

~~CAPTAIN CAVEMAN~~ · 04-18-2007, 10:29 PM

"As you're tears were shed."

*your

Kinda weak. Feels cliched.

Ace · 04-23-2007, 09:49 PM

I could paraphrase that...
"OH EM GEE SOMEONE TOOK MY PARKING PLACE!"
*runs out in a dramatic frenzy*
"THE HORROR!"
*stabs self!*
*peeps to see if anyone is looking >.>*

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 04-24-2007, 09:48 AM

Kinda weak < That's charitable. Here's a word that starts with s and ends in ucks. Have an original thought. Then come back. My friend, "The a--hole" informs me that was an a--hole thing to say. I'm just going to say "I couldn't care less."

Urban Hat€monger ? · 04-24-2007, 04:15 PM

Why do people always write songs when they are angry.
Can't you just down a load of mescaline & write about that instead?

04-18-2007, 07:37 PM	#1 (permalink)
xemoxyox623 Groupie Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: louisiana Posts: 16	emoo ok so a few months ago i got real angry at something. and i wrote this little song and im quite proud of it, if i do say so myself. anyone else's opinions? We sit and think, As we wipe dry. All the tears that we cry. I'm on the brink, The edge of insanity. Wondering what do I see in this vanity? I lay here burning in my mentality Cut, stab Watch them bleed. You'll not suffer For this sinful deed. Put them through their sorrows For they would grieve in the end Take the broken from the heart Try to find a way to mend. You end the pain, Break the streak As they become bleak. In their vein, The cold, it begins to pulse. You watch as they convulse. It finally hits, the true reality. Cut, stab Watch them bleed. You'll not suffer For this sinful deed. Put them through their sorrows For they would grieve in the end Take the broken from the heart Try to find a way to mend. They're finally dead, They're bleeding the red. Enough was said. As you're tears were shed. thanks gitrshredr

04-24-2007, 04:15 PM	#8 (permalink)
Urban Hat€monger ? The Sexual Intellectual Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Somewhere cooler than you Posts: 18,605	Why do people always write songs when they are angry. Can't you just down a load of mescaline & write about that instead? __________________ Urb's RYM Stuff Most people sell their soul to the devil, but the devil sells his soul to Nick Cave.

04-18-2007, 09:04 PM	#3 (permalink)
just for kicks To The Bat Cave! Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Australia Posts: 163	really depressing, wish i hadnt read that

04-18-2007, 09:35 PM	#4 (permalink)
zak Groupie Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Illinois Posts: 15	I agree, i'm kinda down now. /cuts self

04-18-2007, 10:29 PM	#5 (permalink)
~~CAPTAIN CAVEMAN~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: VAN Posts: 2,530	"As you're tears were shed." *your Kinda weak. Feels cliched.