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Old 03-20-2007, 12:04 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Some dimiss haikus due to their brevity, but in actuality they are one of the most difficult structures to write in: you have seventeen syllables to paint a picture that will last--haikus are generally focused on physical images, rather than abstract ideas or symbols.

To appreciate this powerful medium of prose: a contest! Keep them serious, please; and feel free to critique, though I'd prefer entries over criticisms. Make sure to give them names: after a sufficient number have been posted, we can make a poll to decide the 'best' haiku--one entry per user, please.

Here's my entry, which I wrote for a poetry project not too long ago:

The City Slumbers

The city slumbers
unaware of the thunder
on the horizon.
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Old 03-20-2007, 12:05 AM   #2 (permalink)
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na na na na na
na na na na na na na
na na na bat-man!
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Old 03-20-2007, 12:19 AM   #3 (permalink)
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I <3 long titles, especially when they have the same amount of syllables as the piece itself.

To Pirouette Again Under the Curious Gaze of the Watcher

On a silver sheet
We danced in a figure eight
As we kissed through glass.
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Old 03-21-2007, 06:10 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Bump, cmon!
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Postcards Push
There is a staleness
in the air, below my feet
the wind won't blow here


I did it cause ethan told me to.
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Old 03-21-2007, 09:59 PM   #6 (permalink)
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(Last line is four syllables.)
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Old 03-23-2007, 07:31 AM   #7 (permalink)
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I made a few

MDL
We had the cosmos
But sold it for secrecy
Enjoy your future

Sleep
As I shut my eyes
Under the moonlit night sky
You shine on, my star

Sorry
Light pitter-patter
Soothing rain upon our house
The cake is ruined
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Old 03-23-2007, 11:36 AM   #8 (permalink)
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Vitamins
I had me a grape
I had me another grape
Major pukage

The ironic twist of fate on a slippery road
Just for once I would
like to get to know you too
Car crash ruined it
Blah.
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Old 03-23-2007, 01:27 PM   #9 (permalink)
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do tanaka count, ie 31 sylibles 57577 pattern? if so i have some to post up here to, if not i'll post then in a set of haiku instead.

right now a haiku:

sleep amoung the stars
come to me my love
let us frolic in the feilds
and fall among the blooms
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I believe the term is 'tanka'; and sure, that's a variant form of haiku; go for it.
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