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Old 03-12-2007, 01:45 AM   #1 (permalink)
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The serpent sleeps in your stomach,
coiling, uncoiling
with every breath.
He slithers in circles, snaking
round and round,
up and down,
through and through.
You cannot sleep; you lay awake;
you feel him within
yourself, winding.
Tightly clutching your stomach
you reach into your throat
and gag; vomit.
Out the serpent slides, down the drain;
at last he’s gone,
but you still feel sick.
(I apologize for the line breaks: they are automatically inserted with an indent; and I feel the formatting is an important part of this poem.)
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Call it pedantic and shallow for I care; say something.
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It wasn't too bad. It seemed like it was either about being stressed out or the effects of a meth binge, which I've heard can be rough.
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As a matter of fact, I find this meatloaf rather shallow and pedantic *leans back in chair, hands folded.* I'll crit this later, homez.
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As a matter of fact, I find this meatloaf rather shallow and pedantic *leans back in chair, hands folded.* I'll crit this later, homez.
Family Guy ftw;
and you do that. ;D
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