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03-09-2007, 11:01 PM | #1 (permalink) |
The Professor
Join Date: Jan 2007
Location: New York City
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The "If" In Life II
The "If" In Life II Words Surround You Telling you what should be The pressure from your elders Telling you what you should do The worlds eyes ease drop On your every move Watching where you step With hopes of missing a crack Life never gets easier There will always be Sly Selfish Snakes Seeking Your breakdown Dreaming silences the words And shuts the watching eyes If only life was based on dreams and fantasy It’ll unfold the way we want it to But that definition of life Wasn’t in god’s dictionary There is no armor to protect you From life’s epidemic of struggle The uncertain thoughts Are webs to your mind Blocking the much needed uplifting words There is no guarantee that life Will go your way There is no sure path You will be lead down The waters only get rougher Feeling like you can’t continue Will only increase with every day There is only two things were guaranteed Coming into this world greeted with hardship and struggle And leaving this world in a box. |
03-10-2007, 08:02 AM | #4 (permalink) |
Pepper Emergency!
Join Date: Apr 2006
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Alliteration often conveys playfullnes and probably isn't the best thing to use if you're trying to be dramatic. At least in this particular case, because it comes off sounding silly. And I don't like the idea of writing "sequels" in this this fashion (i.e. putting a Roman numeral two at the end of your title).
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