Music Banter - The "If" In Life II

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The "If" In Life II

The "If" In Life II

Words Surround You
Telling you what should be
The pressure from your elders
Telling you what you should do
The worlds eyes ease drop
On your every move
Watching where you step
With hopes of missing a crack
Life never gets easier
There will always be
Sly Selfish Snakes Seeking
Your breakdown
Dreaming silences the words
And shuts the watching eyes
If only life was based on dreams and fantasy
It’ll unfold the way we want it to
But that definition of life
Wasn’t in god’s dictionary
There is no armor to protect you
From life’s epidemic of struggle
The uncertain thoughts
Are webs to your mind
Blocking the much needed uplifting words
There is no guarantee that life
Will go your way
There is no sure path
You will be lead down
The waters only get rougher
Feeling like you can’t continue
Will only increase with every day
There is only two things were guaranteed
Coming into this world greeted with hardship and struggle
And leaving this world in a box.

The "why" in "Why do you keep writing these melodramatic, painfully obvious, poorly worded lyrics?"

Quote:

Originally Posted by Loser (Post 347136)

Sly Selfish Snakes Seeking
Your breakdown[/CENTER]

Alliteration often conveys playfullnes and probably isn't the best thing to use if you're trying to be dramatic. At least in this particular case, because it comes off sounding silly. And I don't like the idea of writing "sequels" in this this fashion (i.e. putting a Roman numeral two at the end of your title).