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Old 03-08-2007, 10:46 PM   #1 (permalink)
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All my chances just had fall apart
I have lost my love toward you
It has been discarded to the bottom of my heart
I no longer have any feeling to concern
I’ve hurts people who have shown me their loves
I’ve locked my emotions away; throw it at the fireplace to burn
Conceal the spell that made people quite humane
I remain on the neutral side with my ambitions or not
It’s not my place to be or there a darkness that haven't sought
The way you people are, it’s irritate me, caring and loving is not my place to be
I've realized that I’m rebellious because I hate being religious!

It’s loveless; it is my true benifit to be unfeeling
And I’m careless; I have no regret of my actions
The way people suffers are my satisfaction
I’m Inhumane but I cannot be stop
My hatred in my heart is at the top
It will take a miracle for me to care
And therefore you have right to be scare

Spell the words that make me feel pains
The day amuse me when it’s damped and stained
I stand in the front of the wall of window
I merely scoffed when I see such despair
Although I have despite the view of rainbow
At the time people glancing, I give them a stare
Which it’s heartless and cold but I can’t get scolded
I was told that I don’t deserve to be in this world
It’s too bad that I am here, and you can’t change things with your words
I believe I get tenacious when I kept hearing people saying to their love ones “you’re precious”

It’s loveless; it is my true benifit to be unfeeling
And I’m careless; I have no regret of my actions
The way people suffers are my satisfaction
I’m Inhumane but I cannot be stop
My hatred in my heart is at the top
It will take a miracle for me to care
And therefore you have right to be scare

I was in a mental rehab but I've escaped into a cab
I’m unlike a human yet Iact like a Lucifer
What takes me to be humane was the girl I have fall for her
I clean my ways, I clean my act
Now she and I can make some pacts
But it’s still like I don’t have a will
To go on a life which I can thrive!

It’s loveless; it is my true benifit to unfeeling
And I’m careless; I have no regret of my actions
The way people suffers are my satisfaction
I’m Inhumane but I cannot be stop
My hatred in my heart is at the top
It will take a miracle for me to care
And therefore you have right to be scare

It’s loveless; it is my true befinit to unfeeling
And I’m careless; I have no regret of my actions
The way people suffers are my satisfaction
I’m Inhumane but I cannot be stop
My hatred in my heart is at the top
It will take a miracle for me to care
And therefore you have right to be scare
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Old 03-09-2007, 12:13 AM   #2 (permalink)
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The English of yours is not so good like, no?
That said I actually really liked the content of this one, it's pretty good.
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Old 03-09-2007, 05:02 PM   #3 (permalink)
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I don't know how it can be in poor english but I do see few minor errors though. if you're in USA then your english is different however I'm in canada.
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Old 03-09-2007, 05:23 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Yeah, here Canada, English be complete different, nothing Americans like we do here.


No, don't excuse yourself, your grammar is atrocious.
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Old 03-09-2007, 05:48 PM   #5 (permalink)
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She/he could be french canadian, and english be her/his second language.
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Old 03-09-2007, 06:26 PM   #6 (permalink)
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I'm not French, I'm Deaf Canadian.
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Old 03-09-2007, 06:35 PM   #7 (permalink)
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Oh...then get a book on grammar.
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Old 03-09-2007, 07:20 PM   #8 (permalink)
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ok.... so tell me, is my english poor when I'm talking to you guys????
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Honestly, your English isn't too bad, I can definitely understand you, but the grammar is bad, I.E. you pluralize (add s's when they don't need it), and use the wrong tense in your verbs, like when you say 'I'd hurts people who have shown their loves, it should say I've hurt people who have shown their love, so in other words, we can definitely understand, but you do need a lesson in grammar, hey I don't know a lick of any other language, so I'm pretty impressed by it.
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Old 03-10-2007, 12:56 PM   #10 (permalink)
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TUTG, why do you write such long fucking posts?
Honestly, would it hurt to sum it up once in a while?
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