My Sunshine (cover, quote, Erhu, Ching)

Loser · 03-08-2007, 06:59 PM

My Sunshine

The moonlight is sunshine to my skin
Walking around these deserted ally ways
And vacant sidewalks
Living among the drug dealers and bums
The sweet silence
Is music to my ears
It relieves all my fears
And clears my eyes of tears
Buildings soar to the skies ceiling
They seem to be taller than any giant
The stars over head stretch as far as the eye can see
The bliss full rays, the safety from there light
Makes me feel like god himself is watching over me
I can see heaven in each star
Suddenly this place doesn’t seem so dim
Suddenly this place isn’t so mysterious and undiscovered
The moonlight is still sunshine to my skin
But the stars will forever light the darkest paths.

What do you guys think

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 03-08-2007, 07:03 PM

Meh, it's okay. The subject itself makes you sound like a pussy.

~~TheUsedToolguy~~ · 03-08-2007, 08:00 PM

pretty good, a lot of good visuals, sometimes being out under the moon and the stars can very peaceful and metaphysical

Strummer521 · 03-08-2007, 08:03 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by PaperHurricanesAndPlanes

Meh, it's okay. The subject itself makes you sound like a pussy.

In poetry it's ok to be sensitive. Most of the old sonnets would make their authors seem like pussys by today's standards, but poetry is meant to be viewed in a different light. It's a baring of the soul, where naked honesty should be accepted.

enemyat_thesix · 03-09-2007, 01:56 AM

I'm glad the ways are on your side; they'd be terrible enemies, indeed.

ZeppelinAir · 03-09-2007, 03:40 AM

not bad, i like the picture it painted

03-08-2007, 06:59 PM	#1 (permalink)
Loser The Professor Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: New York City Posts: 1,113	My Sunshine My Sunshine The moonlight is sunshine to my skin Walking around these deserted ally ways And vacant sidewalks Living among the drug dealers and bums The sweet silence Is music to my ears It relieves all my fears And clears my eyes of tears Buildings soar to the skies ceiling They seem to be taller than any giant The stars over head stretch as far as the eye can see The bliss full rays, the safety from there light Makes me feel like god himself is watching over me I can see heaven in each star Suddenly this place doesn’t seem so dim Suddenly this place isn’t so mysterious and undiscovered The moonlight is still sunshine to my skin But the stars will forever light the darkest paths. What do you guys think

03-09-2007, 03:40 AM	#6 (permalink)
ZeppelinAir Long time no see Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 512	not bad, i like the picture it painted __________________ not that old signature

03-08-2007, 08:00 PM	#3 (permalink)
~~TheUsedToolguy~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Joplin, MO Posts: 468	pretty good, a lot of good visuals, sometimes being out under the moon and the stars can very peaceful and metaphysical