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03-08-2007, 04:26 PM | #1 (permalink) |
Dinosaurus Rex!!!
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Trees Growing From Cliff Faces
Ben Stivers
3/8/07 Trees Growing From Cliff Faces See me going up the path, You tried your best to take my hand Like toy cars, on a track. You tried your best, To guide me back. Watching ocean swells. This bluff is nothing more than air. I dove for miles With nothing there. Mourn for me, And I will call for you. We can trace a line, A rope, a spindle of silk. I will comfort you, As your eyes close, Mine will too. |
03-09-2007, 01:54 AM | #2 (permalink) |
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I'd punctuate the last three lines as follows:
I will comfort you; as your eyes close, mine will, too. Oh, and I really like it. |
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