rest in peace, you’re done (single, quote)

Alo · 03-08-2007, 02:45 PM

A guy I knew jumped off a building, I wrote this for him:

I cry for you bravery
Your sadness, your despair
For how you saw no other way
Because your life was so unfair

I imagine you standing at he edge
Clasping the rail tight
Then slowly loosening your grip
Stuck in a moral fight

Then letting go
The jump
The fall
The single thought
‘I’m done’

It’s over now, we’ll cry for you, rest in peace, you’re done.

ZeppelinAir · 03-09-2007, 03:38 AM

you miss spelled the^^^

its pretty good, short and to the point wish there was more imagery though

sleepy jack · 03-09-2007, 03:42 AM

I like the simpleness, but then again it also seems like it could be a good deal more. I can't explain it.

Alo · 03-09-2007, 05:46 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ZeppelinAir

you miss spelled the^^^

its pretty good, short and to the point wish there was more imagery though

Where? If you mean then, it wasn't misspelled, I meant then.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowquill

I like the simpleness, but then again it also seems like it could be a good deal more. I can't explain it.

I wish it were more, I feel so much more around this all. I just can't seem to put it into words. It just hurts, that he hated himself and his life so much. He was a great guy.

ZeppelinAir · 03-09-2007, 08:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Alo

A guy I knew jumped off a building, I wrote this for him:

I cry for you bravery
Your sadness, your despair
For how you saw no other way
Because your life was so unfair

I imagine you standing at he edge
Clasping the rail tight
Then slowly loosening your grip
Stuck in a moral fight

Then letting go
The jump
The fall
The single thought
‘I’m done’

It’s over now, we’ll cry for you, rest in peace, you’re done.

right there, should have pointed it out better

03-08-2007, 02:45 PM	#1 (permalink)
Alo Scarf Join Date: May 2006 Location: Brighton, UK Posts: 715	rest in peace, you’re done A guy I knew jumped off a building, I wrote this for him: I cry for you bravery Your sadness, your despair For how you saw no other way Because your life was so unfair I imagine you standing at he edge Clasping the rail tight Then slowly loosening your grip Stuck in a moral fight Then letting go The jump The fall The single thought ‘I’m done’ It’s over now, we’ll cry for you, rest in peace, you’re done. __________________ I rocked my shoelaces untied

03-09-2007, 03:38 AM	#2 (permalink)
ZeppelinAir Long time no see Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 512	you miss spelled the^^^ its pretty good, short and to the point wish there was more imagery though __________________ not that old signature