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03-08-2007, 02:40 AM | #14 (permalink) | |
Ban Captain Caveman
Join Date: Jan 2007
Location: In The Realms of Poetry
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You know what'd be great? If everywhere I post you didn't try to put me down. Lol. I mean, it's not that you're succeeding, but your posts are a waste of fucking time. Lol.
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03-08-2007, 03:20 AM | #15 (permalink) |
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guys guys lets just write ill use spell check
and just try to actually read the writings all of them if you can we shoud try to make each other positive constructive criticism not harmful indangerment ps where in the hell is the spell check deal im not downloading it peace love music |
03-08-2007, 11:05 PM | #18 (permalink) |
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theusedtoolguy, stop being such a tool, honestly, if you're going to go out of your way to insult members, at least make it relevant to the thread topic and not be so much of a bullsh*t waste of space post as the one you posted.
theraconteur21, props on cleaning up the spelling and grammer, this way it's not distracting and people can concentrate on the actual poem. Is IS VERY important to do this, because if you can't even take the time to make your poems and songs follow propper gramatical structure, none of us are going to want to take the time to critique it. As for the poem itself, there's some continuity issues here. What I mean by that, is that you've used a lot of different metaphors and analogies, so the point ends up being muddled in all of this. Simplify it by finding one analogy for the ENTIRE song.
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03-09-2007, 03:16 AM | #19 (permalink) |
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well see i did
but because we cant relate you might not understand its just about a girl who dosnt care to be with the one she loves just because shes a bird dosnt mean shes a cat NO spell check SRY |
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