Lost in the Voices (Polish, quote, suicide, Hang)

Kevorkian Logic · 03-03-2007, 08:05 PM

Lost in the Voices

Lesly says she’s dying
On the bathroom floor she’s sobbing
Her composure is hanging by a thread
The voices in her head, the voices in her head
She can’t get them to go
Although she’s pleads and begs with them to leave her be
Insanity is all she sees

She’s vanishing before her eyes
Lesly is melting away
There’s no one there to comfort her
And they just don’t comprehend
That malevolence has grabbed her heart and soul
It’s been too much of a wavering road

Lesly wants to fade away
She forgot who she used to be
There is someone else inside her
Playing tricks within her head

The agony is too much for her to endure
She can't make sense anymore
Her reasoning is twisted and contorted

Lesly guards the polished knife ever so closely
All she wants to do is go
She silent scream of anguish
As the stream of blood flows
She listens for a moment
All that she hears
Is the peaceful sound of silence
Echoing through her tears

~~TheUsedToolguy~~ · 03-03-2007, 10:14 PM

this is alright, it made me think of depression and suicide, but mostly death at the end

Quote:

She listens for a moment
All that she hears
Is the peaceful sound of silence
Echoing through her tears

It made me think of how most people don't want to consider the thought of death. I know you're agnostic, and I don't knock it, but it seems like the most sobering thought to believe one day you completely cease to exist in mind and spirit, and I'm not ruling it out as a possibility. For me, it made me think about how at the moment of death (apologize if I'm creeping anyone out) maybe your spirit-mind does just lapse into this sort of state of transcendent peace, and it remains in that blissful state forever.

~~saffy~~ · 03-04-2007, 04:41 AM

its very good.

ZeppelinAir · 03-04-2007, 05:51 PM

the last verse is the best in my opinion, overall though its good

Kevorkian Logic · 03-04-2007, 08:38 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by TheUsedToolguy

this is alright, it made me think of depression and suicide, but mostly death at the end

It made me think of how most people don't want to consider the thought of death. I know you're agnostic, and I don't knock it, but it seems like the most sobering thought to believe one day you completely cease to exist in mind and spirit, and I'm not ruling it out as a possibility. For me, it made me think about how at the moment of death (apologize if I'm creeping anyone out) maybe your spirit-mind does just lapse into this sort of state of transcendent peace, and it remains in that blissful state forever.

It's about manic depression. It's darker than I usually write, so I wasn't sure how well I could pull it off. Dark and brooding isn't really my forte.

But the last verse, I was trying to get the feeling that this is one of those rare times where everything is connected and you are at peace.

Strummer521 · 03-04-2007, 08:41 PM

Is it just me, or have you gotten prolific all of the sudden?

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 03-04-2007, 08:50 PM

I wanna be prolific *cuts and listens to Evanescence* Lol.

Kevorkian Logic · 03-04-2007, 08:55 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Strummer521

Is it just me, or have you gotten prolific all of the sudden?

In the poems or the comments?

Strummer521 · 03-04-2007, 08:56 PM

Poems.

Kevorkian Logic · 03-04-2007, 09:00 PM

All the poems (except the Mary one) were all written about 4 weeks ago when I was in a interesting place in my life. Did I post them too soon in succession?

03-03-2007, 08:05 PM	#1 (permalink)
Kevorkian Logic Imperfectly Perfect Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: North Carolina Posts: 1,290	Lost in the Voices Lost in the Voices Lesly says she’s dying On the bathroom floor she’s sobbing Her composure is hanging by a thread The voices in her head, the voices in her head She can’t get them to go Although she’s pleads and begs with them to leave her be Insanity is all she sees She’s vanishing before her eyes Lesly is melting away There’s no one there to comfort her And they just don’t comprehend That malevolence has grabbed her heart and soul It’s been too much of a wavering road Lesly wants to fade away She forgot who she used to be There is someone else inside her Playing tricks within her head The agony is too much for her to endure She can't make sense anymore Her reasoning is twisted and contorted Lesly guards the polished knife ever so closely All she wants to do is go She silent scream of anguish As the stream of blood flows She listens for a moment All that she hears Is the peaceful sound of silence Echoing through her tears __________________ "it is only through a limitless accumulation of the imperfect that a certain type of perfection can be attained"

03-04-2007, 05:51 PM	#4 (permalink)
ZeppelinAir Long time no see Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 512	the last verse is the best in my opinion, overall though its good __________________ not that old signature

03-04-2007, 08:41 PM	#6 (permalink)
Strummer521 Pepper Emergency! Join Date: Apr 2006 Posts: 493	Is it just me, or have you gotten prolific all of the sudden? __________________ "Caffeine is so ridiculous right now." RZA

03-04-2007, 08:56 PM	#9 (permalink)
Strummer521 Pepper Emergency! Join Date: Apr 2006 Posts: 493	Poems. __________________ "Caffeine is so ridiculous right now." RZA

03-04-2007, 09:00 PM	#10 (permalink)
Kevorkian Logic Imperfectly Perfect Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: North Carolina Posts: 1,290	All the poems (except the Mary one) were all written about 4 weeks ago when I was in a interesting place in my life. Did I post them too soon in succession? __________________ "it is only through a limitless accumulation of the imperfect that a certain type of perfection can be attained"

03-04-2007, 04:41 AM	#3 (permalink)
~~saffy~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 7	its very good.