Mistaken Evil (music and lyrics, goth, quote, band, song)

Loser · 02-17-2007, 06:49 PM

How is the listener suppose to know what you mean.

Dark Circle · 02-17-2007, 07:01 PM

I'll let it to their imagination

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 02-17-2007, 08:31 PM

[on writing about sunshine and butterflies]
Life is not about that and I can't symbolize anything with that! < You suck.

I'll let it to their imagination < That's code for "I can't write anything good." See, there is symbolism, then there is this. This, is shit.

Bottom line, I wouldn't quit my day job, if I were you.

Dark Circle · 02-17-2007, 08:36 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dark Circle

If there was a smiley that says OH MY GOD in an indifferent kind of way I would use it right now

There is no way for you to tell what is going on inside my head!

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 02-17-2007, 08:49 PM

The whole point of writing is to send a message. Whether about your emotions, or politics. It has to be decryptable...probably not a word, but, that's okay, I don't care. If your lyrics say nothing, they mean nothing and no one will care.

There is no way for you to tell what is going on inside my head! < Pretty much my point. That's why you have to make it known.

Dark Circle · 02-17-2007, 08:53 PM

I never write meaningless things but I sense that you won't listen to what I have to say, so why bother?

Sneer · 02-17-2007, 09:27 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Loser

If you want to get signed and make it big writing about anger and death won't get you far, write about depression or something that will sell.

Its not about writing what will sell. Its about whats true to you, no matter how worryingly morbid and crude those feelings are. Not everybody likes to write about blossom, the stars and sunshine, in fact im glad he didnt. Its not a very good piece at all, but i dont think anybody here has the right to tell anyone else what they should and shouldnt be writing about. Regardless of the subject, its the execution that matters. Although unfortunatly thats something that doesnt make the cut with this piece, but keep keep going and be more descriptive with your vocabulary, whilst also being less cliche.

BTW, a poem doesnt have to relate to everybody to have meaning. If it has a personal meaning to the writer then surely thats all thats needed.

Dark Circle · 02-17-2007, 09:35 PM

Finally someone understood!

Sneer · 02-17-2007, 09:38 PM

doesnt mean im a fan of the piece im afraid, you need to work on it and be more methodical in your choice of language. It sounds like something a 14 year old angst ridden adolesecent would write. I've no beef with the subject, but the way you've approached it isnt great. work on it though.

Dark Circle · 02-17-2007, 09:41 PM

i don't think that this song will ever have fans. I wrote it when I was 14

02-17-2007, 09:38 PM	#39 (permalink)
Sneer Let it drip Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 5,430	doesnt mean im a fan of the piece im afraid, you need to work on it and be more methodical in your choice of language. It sounds like something a 14 year old angst ridden adolesecent would write. I've no beef with the subject, but the way you've approached it isnt great. work on it though. __________________ LastFM Sneer's Emporium of Sound Fright Team radio show

02-17-2007, 06:49 PM	#31 (permalink)
Loser The Professor Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: New York City Posts: 1,113	How is the listener suppose to know what you mean.

02-17-2007, 07:01 PM	#32 (permalink)
Dark Circle Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 129	I'll let it to their imagination

02-17-2007, 08:53 PM	#36 (permalink)
Dark Circle Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 129	I never write meaningless things but I sense that you won't listen to what I have to say, so why bother?

02-17-2007, 09:35 PM	#38 (permalink)
Dark Circle Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 129	Finally someone understood!

02-17-2007, 09:41 PM	#40 (permalink)
Dark Circle Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 129	i don't think that this song will ever have fans. I wrote it when I was 14