Rendered Immobile
 

Rendered immobile
Flummoxed with grief
Discordant retentions of blasé belief
Pious ramblings
Bludgeoned till dead
A nuance of grey coats the richest of red.
Haughty delinquents
Splattered in blame
Seeds of denial cloud the towers of shame
Banal resistance
Fades once again
The tumult subsides all efforts invain.

What the hell is this about? It seems way too pretentious, and it bores.

From someone who's 'location' is "In The Realms of Poetry" to call this pretentious and to say it bores...is a tad rich.

Try reading 3 lines at a time, then attempt to understand what Stu has gone to the trouble of posting.

Baby steps, PaperHurricanesAndPlanes...baby steps. ;)

i like it, it has a dark feel to it and it flows pretty well. you should do more like this one

I dont know what its about but I like the ryhming

dont call me pretentious when you quote your own poetry in your signature.

Hey, I didn't quote my own poetry. That's a Bad Religion song. And "Compassion Through Heresy" was a motto before it was a title of one of my poems. How is "In the realms of poetry" pretentious?

YEAH! WHO IN THE HELL DOES THAT???

I hate that word. Otherwise I enjoy the brief manner of each line... YOU LIKE MY DUBBLE POST GUYZ?

I second that disliking of flummoxed.

Your critiques are way too pretentious and so arrogant they're almost pointless to read. Seriously, turn the elitism down a notch.

If your getting at me, my signature is lyrics from a whirlwind heat song, if your getting at yourself, the difference is you dont go round calling over people pretentious.

WHOA hate for the flummox... ok, i'll change it.

You should leave it as it is.
It's a perfectly good word and fits well within the context.

What is the poem about?

Unless I'm told otherwise I'm going to assume it's about the movie "Hot Fuzz" because that seems as good an explanation as any.

I was getting at myself :D

Crowe is so pretentious.

Is it pretentious to quote myself calling someone else pretentious?

Lol

HAHA, is it pretentious of me to reject the word 'lol' because im too underground and unconformist?

And DRMO, its about the way youths are treated around where i live, we seem to get the blame for all of the communities woes and i think its completely unfounded. Yet whatever we say or do is no use. I think this can be applied to most coomunities and society as a whole. Theres also a little dig at religion at the start... just for good measure.