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Old 02-12-2007, 04:24 AM   #4 (permalink)
that's my war face.
 
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Please change path to road or something else. The rhyming made me cringe. Some cleaning up and making it more connected wouldn't hurt though all in all it's pretty good.
I didn't actually intend those words to rhyme.. I pronounce 'laugh' as 'larf'.

Maybe the next ones I write will be better... I'm not having another day in for a while, that's for sure.

Ta for the advice anyways, even though I'm really not gonna progress on this one.
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