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Sneer · 02-12-2007, 05:27 PM

i said at the start this was an experimentation, repetition and paradox is something i do not use enough and i was trying to introduce both into this poem. i didnt use 'cacophony' just for the fact its a good word, i used it because it described the situation i was in at the time, the silence was deafening and creating an absolute tumult in my head. Its something i distinctly remember about the situation. Nevertheless, i appreciate your points.

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 02-12-2007, 01:31 PM

I thought the cacophony of silence line was the best here.

skindredluver · 02-12-2007, 06:05 PM

Its good but you should use more descriptive words!But I shouldnt be the one to say cause I suck

02-12-2007, 05:27 PM	#1 (permalink)
Sneer Let it drip Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 5,397	i said at the start this was an experimentation, repetition and paradox is something i do not use enough and i was trying to introduce both into this poem. i didnt use 'cacophony' just for the fact its a good word, i used it because it described the situation i was in at the time, the silence was deafening and creating an absolute tumult in my head. Its something i distinctly remember about the situation. Nevertheless, i appreciate your points. __________________ LastFM Sneer's Emporium of Sound Fright Team radio show

02-12-2007, 06:05 PM	#3 (permalink)
skindredluver Im Just As Sweet!!!:) Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: america Posts: 570	Its good but you should use more descriptive words!But I shouldnt be the one to say cause I suck __________________ Let them live in the stillness and know the flame. They will loose all and give all.. Boys are like lava lamps: fun to look at but not so bright Coffee, chocolate and men, some things are just better rich