The Hills above the clouds (member, song, hands)

either/or · 02-05-2007, 11:27 PM

In the trappings of the night
we have arrived

Where they've broken all the mirrors
and criticism runs like rivers

It gets bent out of shape here
And mortal beings can dissapear
These numbers will shine pure and clear
And oh as the sound distorts
My hands reach for an angel of sorts
We melt together and blend our thoughts
And we touch, oh we touch

Spinning out around and round
They bring us down to skim the ground
slow, slow, slow, slow
Scream behind a black and white screen
And to live with you how could it seem
because all we do is mask the dirt
to once more be clean

And in the blessing of the morning
We have left again

* this song is about nitrous oxide, im not condoning usage of it, but thats where it came from.

ZeppelinAir · 02-06-2007, 03:41 AM

its pretty good, i like it

angel18 · 02-06-2007, 07:46 AM

I really like this. It's nice and short and pretty simple to understand. Good work.

Angel

Loser · 02-06-2007, 08:19 AM

I like the middle of it just great. The very beginning I had trouble understanding, can you clarify.

Crowe · 02-06-2007, 01:24 PM

Interesting song about a drug induced state of mind. We don't get that a lot around here - it would be interesting to take us into your mind while it was happening - a little chaos in the middle yeah?

PaperHurricanesAndPlanes · 02-06-2007, 03:21 PM

Clarification, especially in pieces like this, is crucial. Not enough here. Your rhymes are bland. Ground/round, are you serious? Lack of good imagery, or much at all make for a boring piece. Sorry. You don't even mention NO2 here. Sorry, especially since you liked my piece, but that's how the cookie crumbles, dawg.

either/or · 02-06-2007, 05:04 PM

cool, yeah some of those words are rather boring. im gonna cut the first lines off totally, they dont really link up with the rest cause its not real a self loathing situation. ill work on fixing the second verse up and then hit yall up with an edit sometime soon. if i can remember...

02-05-2007, 11:27 PM	#1 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	The Hills above the clouds In the trappings of the night we have arrived Where they've broken all the mirrors and criticism runs like rivers It gets bent out of shape here And mortal beings can dissapear These numbers will shine pure and clear And oh as the sound distorts My hands reach for an angel of sorts We melt together and blend our thoughts And we touch, oh we touch Spinning out around and round They bring us down to skim the ground slow, slow, slow, slow Scream behind a black and white screen And to live with you how could it seem because all we do is mask the dirt to once more be clean And in the blessing of the morning We have left again * this song is about nitrous oxide, im not condoning usage of it, but thats where it came from. __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

02-06-2007, 03:41 AM	#2 (permalink)
ZeppelinAir Long time no see Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 512	its pretty good, i like it __________________ not that old signature

02-06-2007, 01:24 PM	#5 (permalink)
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 699	Interesting song about a drug induced state of mind. We don't get that a lot around here - it would be interesting to take us into your mind while it was happening - a little chaos in the middle yeah? __________________

02-06-2007, 05:04 PM	#7 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	cool, yeah some of those words are rather boring. im gonna cut the first lines off totally, they dont really link up with the rest cause its not real a self loathing situation. ill work on fixing the second verse up and then hit yall up with an edit sometime soon. if i can remember... __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

02-06-2007, 07:46 AM	#3 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	I really like this. It's nice and short and pretty simple to understand. Good work. Angel

02-06-2007, 08:19 AM	#4 (permalink)
Loser The Professor Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: New York City Posts: 1,113	I like the middle of it just great. The very beginning I had trouble understanding, can you clarify.