Mystic Grey-Black Sky

ZeppelinAir · 02-04-2007, 02:50 AM

i would really if a few of you could tell me what i did right and did wrong on this poem

Mystic Grey-Black Sky

A funnel of chaos falls from the sky
In the midst of the mothers howl,
Hounds in the hell passes and the mother will sigh,
Leaving the symbol through the fields and cities,
Splinters of our shattered lives,
Fly and pierce into our eyes,
Bleeding and broken we continue on,
Though we always shall wonder,
How many had to die when chaos fell from the sky

02-04-2007, 02:50 AM	#1 (permalink)
ZeppelinAir Long time no see Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere in Michigan Posts: 513	Mystic Grey-Black Sky i would really if a few of you could tell me what i did right and did wrong on this poem Mystic Grey-Black Sky A funnel of chaos falls from the sky In the midst of the mothers howl, Hounds in the hell passes and the mother will sigh, Leaving the symbol through the fields and cities, Splinters of our shattered lives, Fly and pierce into our eyes, Bleeding and broken we continue on, Though we always shall wonder, How many had to die when chaos fell from the sky __________________ not that old signature