Confused
 

I dont want to stay here anymore
I really cant tell you how I feel
Cause i know youll take it wrong
I have nothing else to confess
I already got it all off my chest
It hurts me more and more every day
Not quite sure if im gonna go away
I cant stand this pain anymore
Its really getting old
Your yelling and screaming
All the things ruined
Nothing survives our fights
For some reason i wish
I could make up my mind


Wow it really sucks!:laughing:
I changes it a l;ittle but its still gae

yeah it does :usehead:

It's not bad I like a couple of lines it was alright just try to make it more abstract or make it like a story sort of, that helps alot.

its catchy, and it doesnt suck, needs a bit of work though

Thanx:laughing:

it needs a lot of work, im a fan of very short poems but this doesnt make the cut for me. your not the worst i've seen though :)

Who is the worst everyone here has some talent it'll be hard to see who's the worst.

im the worst :D

^you've gone a long way though.


I hate broad statements with nothing behind them in poems. That's what's wrong with this. It's a bunch of broad ideas. There's nothing personal or unique or about it.

im not talking about this forum, i've seen many more poems than what people post on here.