I still stand by what i say!

so i am :( , im going to cry in the corner now

good stuff, accepting criticism is half the battle, just work on it and i think it'll be rather good :)

Thanx I will keep trying

the word choice needs a little help. The 3rd grade vocabulary choice doesnt make it that powerful. But it's the first non-emo cliched riddled poem/lyrics that I have read on this site, which makes it my favorite.

you what?

As in it hurts how they always fight and yell you know

This made me LOL.

Plus hating lyrics based on the group you place them in yourself is also pretty awesome.

And your typical emo bands lyrics are very good, but you probably think Fall Out Boy is emo so whatever.


Oh skindredluver, read a book expand your vocabulary and read better peoples stuff and all that jazz. Because theres no vocabulary, its boring too read and a bland topic.

In an effort to make Kovorkian Logic feel stupid, let's play "Spot the Cliched Words and Phrases Game," where anything cliched is in bold type face. READY? GO

it's not cliched as most of the lyrics are. i'm talking "I'm tired of playing this game of life" cliches. I mean if you say that whole poem is a cliche, then basically saying emotions are cliche.

I was also trying to be nice because I just had insulted her.