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Old 01-28-2007, 02:39 PM   #1 (permalink)
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In the light of a winters night, I sit, I yearn, yearn for the times
Where the glisten of your eye lit the darkest of days.
The warmth of your touch embroiled all that chilled.
Yet those days have gone, I’m left in this cold, dark abyss,
Bereft of the love I so sorely miss.

Oh! Why does this pain scorch the core, the core of this stoic temple,
Built for the sanguine reverence of the truest of love.
For the unaltered bliss that lit the stars.
Unveiling the moon, bathing the bloom in a benign glow,
A sweeping cascade of ghostly beauty in full flow.

Alas, the cascade met the raging torrents, baying chasms, a void,
Twisting and savaging the fragile junctures of a fledging seed,
Layer by layer dismembering the walls we called life,
Until, exposed to the evils of a bitter reality,
We collapse into the void, victims of our own frailty.

So here I sit, in times of change, conspicuous in all I do,
Your smell still rankles, in this mind, a barren scope of solemn lust,
And though I cope, if cope is to reflect, the pain is tied around my neck,
In this old harbour, sits your ship, solitary as grey clouds swirl,
And still I believe in you, my girl.
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Old 01-28-2007, 05:02 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I like it, especially how it ended.
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Old 01-28-2007, 06:05 PM   #3 (permalink)
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I like the whole thing a lot
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Old 01-28-2007, 06:06 PM   #4 (permalink)
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I second that
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Old 01-28-2007, 07:07 PM   #5 (permalink)
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In the light of a winters night, I sit, I yearn, yearn for the times
Where the glisten of your eye lit the darkest of days.
The warmth of your touch embroiled all that chilled.
Yet those days have gone, I’m left in this cold, dark abyss,
Bereft of the love I so sorely miss.

Oh! Why does this pain scorch the core, the core of this stoic temple,
Built for the sanguine reverence of the truest of love.
For the unaltered bliss that lit the stars.
Unveiling the moon, bathing the bloom in a benign glow,
A sweeping cascade of ghostly beauty in full flow.

Alas, the cascade met the raging torrents, baying chasms, a void,
Twisting and savaging the fragile junctures of a fledging seed,
Layer by layer dismembering the walls we called life,
Until, exposed to the evils of a bitter reality,
We collapse into the void, victims of our own frailty.

So here I sit, in times of change, conspicuous in all I do,
Your smell still rankles, in this mind, a barren scope of solemn lust,
And though I cope, if cope is to reflect, the pain is tied around my neck,
In this old harbour, sits your ship, solitary as grey clouds swirl,
And still I believe in you, my girl.
what is this word!!!?
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Old 01-28-2007, 08:01 PM   #6 (permalink)
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ran·kle /ˈræŋkəl/ Pronunciation Key - Show Spelled Pronunciation[rang-kuhl] Pronunciation Key - Show IPA Pronunciation verb, -kled, -kling.
–verb (used without object) 1. (of unpleasant feelings, experiences, etc.) to continue to cause keen irritation or bitter resentment within the mind; fester; be painful.
–verb (used with object) 2. to cause keen irritation or bitter resentment in: His colleague's harsh criticism rankled him for days
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Old 01-28-2007, 10:46 PM   #7 (permalink)
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Wow. I haven't come across a word I haven't heard in a LONG, LONG time! That is ridiculous. Kudos to you good sir!
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