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01-24-2007, 08:41 PM | #22 (permalink) |
Freeskier
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: Istanbul was Constantinople now it's Istanbul not Constantinople...
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hahaha, sorry, i keep forgetting you're a girl. I shouldnt do that really, everyone always used to think i was a guy when i first joined this forum.
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What you've done becomes the judge of what you're going to do -- especially in other people's minds. When you're traveling, you are what you are right there and then. People don't have your past to hold against you. No yesterdays on the road. William Least Heat Moon, Blue Highways Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass. HOOKED ON THE WHITE POWDER |
01-24-2007, 08:41 PM | #24 (permalink) | |
Freeskier
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and as for us being off topic, we've critiqued the song, it's unanimous, EVERYTHING is cheesy, EVERY LINE needs to be changed. what more do you want us to say? would you like some synonyms for the words cheesy and cliche?
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What you've done becomes the judge of what you're going to do -- especially in other people's minds. When you're traveling, you are what you are right there and then. People don't have your past to hold against you. No yesterdays on the road. William Least Heat Moon, Blue Highways Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass. HOOKED ON THE WHITE POWDER |
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01-25-2007, 02:14 AM | #25 (permalink) |
Don't think twice
Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: A basement on the hill
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i love this song. i think it flows well and it makes me look at love and the entire mystery of human existence in a new way. look out dylan you've met your match!
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Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation |
01-28-2007, 03:02 PM | #27 (permalink) |
The Professor
Join Date: Jan 2007
Location: New York City
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Harsh indeed I actually liked it. Letting your heart out on paper from anger to heartbreak to family issues may not be good it still releaves the person of the burden to deal with it. Poetry and music go hand in hand with letting your feelings out it may not be shared with other people, but the only thing that matters is feeling good to let out such emotions.
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01-29-2007, 02:38 PM | #28 (permalink) |
Is The Spider
Join Date: Jan 2007
Location: New York
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My God pick up a book.
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01-29-2007, 04:25 PM | #30 (permalink) |
Long time no see
Join Date: Jun 2006
Location: somewhere in Michigan
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it has a problem with flow, a lot of the lines dont go to gather well, still there a few good lines in there, it does need quite a bit of work, keep working on it think of more detailed words to replace the overused ones
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