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01-18-2007, 09:50 PM | #1 (permalink) |
Groupie
Join Date: Jan 2007
Posts: 4
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some lyrics i wrote yesterday
when the last words she said
were "i don't love you anymore" i broke down and said to her i gave my heart to you, wasnt worth it at all all it gave me in the end were tears, sweat, and blood your travesties continue to tear me your the cause of my heartlessness i cant stop fighting now these bitter voices they bear into my head, raping my thoughts dry i just have one more thing to ask give me my god damn heart back i poured it out to you till i am left dry nothing but a black holed chest the body waiting to die too bad it aint gonna happen cause heartlessness cant kill one day i will get it back bore into your thick skull i will steal back what is mine what i lived for, all this time i went through the pain of being there for you through all your tears, your hopes, your wishes, and you know its true you never did the same for me and you left me for dead like this you brought me to be heartless im heartless im heartless im heartless **** your life im heartless im heartless im heartless **** your life im heartless im heartless im heartless you sucked me dry
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01-18-2007, 09:54 PM | #2 (permalink) |
isfckingdead
Join Date: Nov 2004
Posts: 18,967
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While its cliche it reminds me of something written by Converge, which is good. Get rid of the whole last part though, its not good.
Your avatar pwnz. Stick around, i'll write a better critique when i'm feeling better. |
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