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01-04-2007, 10:41 PM | #1 (permalink) | |
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Happiness Is The Tragedy
Not sure on this poem. Screw homophobes.
Happiness Is The Tragedy “I love you,” were his last words to him Before he fell into a deep sleep. No, not death, just fatigue. And the stars in their eyes, were perfectly aligned. Happiness is the tragedy you get when you put two men together. She put her hands around her waist, And kissed her on the lips. And held her, ever, so gently. Their love drips, freely from every pore. Happiness is the tragedy you get when you put two women together. Your hate, and your vicious placards, won’t stop a thing. If showing love means breaking the law, then so be it. You can scream at us through one corner of your mouth, And tell your kids to stop having sex out of the other corner. Happiness is the tragedy you get when you put us together. You can tell your constituents all humans matter. And then use your pocket bible to justify hating us. Maybe one day you can teach me, To be as hypocritical as thee, and not get caught. Happiness is the tragedy you get when you put us together. The newscaster can breeze through a hate crime, “Homosexuals sodomized and beaten behind a club, and now sports,” And say, that they’re fair and balanced. Yeah, thee doesn't fit at the end. No I don't care.
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01-04-2007, 11:11 PM | #3 (permalink) | |
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Can't slip anything past you, can I? Lol. I'll probably be adding to this. I just wanted an opinion on what I had. And now...for crits.
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01-05-2007, 12:40 AM | #4 (permalink) |
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"And tell your kids to stop having sex with the other." Is kind of a weak way to end that verse.
Also take out the first happiness is the tragedy you get when you put us together, so it doesn't get overly repetitive. *bolds the us so you know which one hes talking about* |
01-06-2007, 12:53 AM | #5 (permalink) |
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The whole thing just sounds like a democrat trying to bitch and moan. That aside, the "Fair and balanced" line is extremely played out these days. Its Fox News' slogan, their right wing, we get it. It was IMO better before you edited it and added the last 3 verses. It loses meaning when you bring all the political BS into it.
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01-06-2007, 12:54 AM | #6 (permalink) | |
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01-06-2007, 12:56 AM | #7 (permalink) | |
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Right...because they're so unrelated.
It's merely coming from a compassionate. The political stuff is there only because it is relevant to the problem. Like the whole anti-gay marriage thing...Family values suck. I'm sick and tired of that shit. I'm no democrat either. I hate democrats, and republicans. They're both idiots. Jello for president!
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01-06-2007, 03:01 AM | #10 (permalink) | |
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It's not anti-republican, it's anti-homophobia. What the hell do you mean clean and pure? I can't talk about politics because it's impure? That's just fucking stupid.
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