Far Better Artists Than I (lyrics, country, single, Europe)

DontRunMeOver · 11-30-2006, 05:15 PM

I planned
I planned
The future to the smallest detail

Yet the dreams
Life provides
Surpass those we thought up ourselves

For you
Were not designed
By my hand
I truly thank
Your parents
They must be far better artists
Than I

As a boy
As a boy
An explorer I hoped to become

Yet expedition
Is futile
When what you need is right here at home

You
Do not fit
Within my plans
So I alter them to suit
Around your figure I shall draw
My whole life

My one single reason
One single motive
To scratch these itchy feet
And to stay

One single reason
One single motive
Not to leave this rainy island
Today

right-track · 11-30-2006, 05:24 PM

I like the sentiment DRMO and the way it's written.

I hope this isn't inspired by personal experience though.
If it is, a word of advice...get back to the drawing board.
Women ruin your life.

Is the 'Today' bit a doubt?
If it is...good man.

DontRunMeOver · 11-30-2006, 05:42 PM

Well, yes it is, because this one is about my girlfriend and the fact that I am something of a travelling/exploring/adventure junkie and that it's pretty much just the fact that I end up missing her like a big crybaby that stops me from spending my whole life running through jungle, up, down and off mountains, paddling down rivers and doing all that crazy **** that you can do with a few hundred quid, a lot of balls and little initiative.

I'll probably end up married, bitter and cynical, glaring at her across the sofa as the kids try to kill each other... I suppose sentiment can be yet another of the many self-destruct buttons we humans possess.

right-track · 11-30-2006, 05:55 PM

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Originally Posted by DontRunMeOver

Well, yes it is, because this one is about my girlfriend and the fact that I am something of a travelling/exploring/adventure junkie and that it's pretty much just the fact that I end up missing her like a big crybaby that stops me from spending my whole life running through jungle, up, down and off mountains, paddling down rivers and doing all that crazy **** that you can do with a few hundred quid, a lot of balls and little initiative.

I'll probably end up married, bitter and cynical, glaring at her across the sofa as the kids try to kill each other... I suppose sentiment can be yet another of the many self-destruct buttons we humans possess.

I did all that in my younger years. Foriegn travel/backpacking blah blah.

Ended up just as you describe you might...and you will.

adidasss · 11-30-2006, 06:51 PM

^^well there's a happy thought...

swim · 11-30-2006, 08:02 PM

That's extremely good in a really simple way which makes it even better.

RT, where'd you go?

right-track · 12-01-2006, 02:42 PM

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Originally Posted by swimintheundertow

That's extremely good in a really simple way which makes it even better.

RT, where'd you go?

Yeah, it's straight forward and simple. Not a word wasted.
Neat and tidy, which gives it that 'finished' look.
Possibly the best you've done yet, though I doubt you'd agree.

swim...backpacking in this order; Greek Islands (a memorable nightmare), South America (mainly Mexico with Barbados on the return), Europe (parts of), then South East Asia, which included Thailand (during a coop within a week of arriving and the whole country was put under Martial Law, for the duration of my stay

), Laos, Malaysia, plus an unforgettable, illegal trip across the Burmese border (under armed guard, during an airstrike on tribal factions). The time of my life...women don't compare. jk. jk.

Note: not all done in one go.

Crowe · 12-01-2006, 03:42 PM

after hearing the life story behind it... it made a lot more sense and gave it a lot more meaning...

btw..

She Smiled For All of Us? WHen is it gonna be done, I"M AMPED>

jibber · 12-03-2006, 01:41 AM

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Originally Posted by DontRunMeOver

Well, yes it is, because this one is about my girlfriend and the fact that I am something of a travelling/exploring/adventure junkie and that it's pretty much just the fact that I end up missing her like a big crybaby that stops me from spending my whole life running through jungle, up, down and off mountains, paddling down rivers and doing all that crazy **** that you can do with a few hundred quid, a lot of balls and little initiative.

I'll probably end up married, bitter and cynical, glaring at her across the sofa as the kids try to kill each other... I suppose sentiment can be yet another of the many self-destruct buttons we humans possess.

yeah....just go off traveling, if it's a strong relationship you can stay together. although thats just my opinion.

about the song now, since this is a songwriting forum....I really liked the structure of it, its different and unpredictable. just out of curiosity, what kind of music are you planning on putting this to? in my head its kind of a softer accoustic song, just because it's my opinion that that style works really well with the kind of unstructured lyrics you've written

DontRunMeOver · 12-03-2006, 05:28 PM

I'ts recorded and up on the net now

www.myspace.com/jodileeparker

"Far Better Artists Than I"

This first verse is a bit limp on the vocals I think, I might re-record that bit later... probably won't though :P

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Originally Posted by jibber

about the song now, since this is a songwriting forum....I really liked the structure of it, its different and unpredictable. just out of curiosity, what kind of music are you planning on putting this to? in my head its kind of a softer accoustic song, just because it's my opinion that that style works really well with the kind of unstructured lyrics you've written

That's what I've got at the moment, although listening to it, it would suit gentler playing and singing too.

11-30-2006, 06:51 PM	#5 (permalink)
adidasss Slavic gay sauce Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Abu Dhabi Posts: 7,993	^^well there's a happy thought... __________________ “Think of what a paradise this world would be if men were kind and wise.” - Kurt Vonnegut, Cat's Cradle. Last.fm

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swim dontcareaboutyou Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: North Carolina Posts: 5,188	That's extremely good in a really simple way which makes it even better. RT, where'd you go? __________________ http://nakednaps.bandcamp.com/

12-01-2006, 03:42 PM	#8 (permalink)
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 699	after hearing the life story behind it... it made a lot more sense and gave it a lot more meaning... btw.. She Smiled For All of Us? WHen is it gonna be done, I"M AMPED> __________________

11-30-2006, 05:24 PM	#2 (permalink)
right-track Atchin' Akai Join Date: May 2005 Location: Unamerica Posts: 8,723	I like the sentiment DRMO and the way it's written. I hope this isn't inspired by personal experience though. If it is, a word of advice...get back to the drawing board. Women ruin your life. Is the 'Today' bit a doubt? If it is...good man.