Spires (lyric, song)

TrampInaTux · 10-28-2006, 02:51 PM

Listen to the dead of night
out of your bedroom window
you can hear the cars below
the lights of the city glaring into your eyes

The demons are closing in
on their two wheeled chariots
You can see the hell awaiting
and what you foresee is what's in store for you

The spires oversee everything
this is your world and you are king
What is right and what is wrong?
Brainwashed to sing the same song

Whistle at the angels in sight
Looking so holy without the light
Watch the miracle of life
and witness death all in the same night

The spires oversee everything
this is your world and you are king
What is right and what is wrong?
Brainwashed to sing the same song

Story of a regular kids life down here, but I put my own little twist on it...

The Dave · 10-31-2006, 08:33 AM

What you have is good, paints a really good mental picture but it seems like there's more to it then what you posted, like there could be at least a couple more versus to make the story come full circle.

sleepy jack · 10-31-2006, 03:14 PM

and witness death all in the same night

Take out the and there, it just doesn't need to be there.

I really like it I kind of wish it was longer though. I liked "The demons are closing in" line best.

Kyren Tsunami · 11-14-2006, 11:23 PM

i agree with those two, if that lyric were to be written in your full potential I'll believe we'll all be amazed by it then...

10-28-2006, 02:51 PM	#1 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Spires Listen to the dead of night out of your bedroom window you can hear the cars below the lights of the city glaring into your eyes The demons are closing in on their two wheeled chariots You can see the hell awaiting and what you foresee is what's in store for you The spires oversee everything this is your world and you are king What is right and what is wrong? Brainwashed to sing the same song Whistle at the angels in sight Looking so holy without the light Watch the miracle of life and witness death all in the same night The spires oversee everything this is your world and you are king What is right and what is wrong? Brainwashed to sing the same song Story of a regular kids life down here, but I put my own little twist on it...

11-14-2006, 11:23 PM	#4 (permalink)
Kyren Tsunami Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2006 Posts: 64	i agree with those two, if that lyric were to be written in your full potential I'll believe we'll all be amazed by it then... __________________ all the songs I've Wrotes cames from experiences from the past, present and future.

10-31-2006, 08:33 AM	#2 (permalink)
The Dave Me and The Major Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Kentucky Posts: 1,830	What you have is good, paints a really good mental picture but it seems like there's more to it then what you posted, like there could be at least a couple more versus to make the story come full circle.