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Old 10-12-2006, 11:25 PM   #1 (permalink)
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The sky fell last week;
Rather, the buildings did.
Concrete crumbling around us,
We ran for the hills;

Nothing could crush us there.

(I did not write these as lyrics; I hope plain ol' poetry is acceptable, as well. )
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Old 10-13-2006, 03:09 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Extend it! Its good, the ending is kind of weak though.
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Old 10-13-2006, 03:12 PM   #3 (permalink)
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^ I agree with Crowquill, maybe you could extend it by making it into a metaphor. And if it is already, make it more obvious.
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Old 10-14-2006, 12:44 AM   #4 (permalink)
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the alliteration was my favorite part.

I loved it. (see i really loved it)
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