Head like a sieve (title, song, Hang)

TrampInaTux · 10-11-2006, 02:35 PM

Burdens fill the gaps
The sun shines through my body
With my back to it
I run from everybody
Pieces of a boy
The shadow of a man
Caught between the two
Lost without a plan

Tears in the message centre
The old mans been there since December

And I know we'll make it in the end

Effort consumes my soul
Realisation is a bother
Facing outward to the world
Not looking at the problem
I'll stare you in the eye
And nothing will have changed
My face forces a smile
but broken I remain

Tears in the message centre
The old mans been there since December

And I know we'll make it in the end
I'll try my best and that's all I can give
But it's hard when your heads like a sieve...
It's hard when your heads like a sieve...

You might not agree, but I'm going to be ****y and say this is my favourite piece of work I've done in a while. Please comment...

right-track · 10-11-2006, 02:36 PM

Love the title ^

TrampInaTux · 10-11-2006, 02:51 PM

I was actually a bit indifferent about it... wondered whether it would sound like I was throwing it in their just to rhyme...what you think of the actual song?

right-track · 10-11-2006, 03:04 PM

Has it got a chorus?
If not I like the idea of this being it...

Tears in the message centre
The old mans been there since December
And I know we'll make it in the end
I'll try my best and that's all I can give
But it's hard when your heads like a sieve...
It's hard when your heads like a sieve...

And having read it again several times, I have to say the first verse is brilliant.
Also, I would have picked the line...Pieces Of A Boy, Shadow Of A Man, as the title, despite liking your pick.

It's one of your better ones.

Urban Hat€monger ? · 10-11-2006, 03:12 PM

This thread reminds me of sievehead from Saturday Superstore

right-track · 10-11-2006, 03:15 PM

^

How I hate Mike Read.

10-11-2006, 02:35 PM	#1 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Head like a sieve Burdens fill the gaps The sun shines through my body With my back to it I run from everybody Pieces of a boy The shadow of a man Caught between the two Lost without a plan Tears in the message centre The old mans been there since December And I know we'll make it in the end Effort consumes my soul Realisation is a bother Facing outward to the world Not looking at the problem I'll stare you in the eye And nothing will have changed My face forces a smile but broken I remain Tears in the message centre The old mans been there since December And I know we'll make it in the end I'll try my best and that's all I can give But it's hard when your heads like a sieve... It's hard when your heads like a sieve... You might not agree, but I'm going to be ****y and say this is my favourite piece of work I've done in a while. Please comment...

10-11-2006, 03:12 PM	#5 (permalink)
Urban Hat€monger ? The Sexual Intellectual Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Somewhere cooler than you Posts: 18,605	This thread reminds me of sievehead from Saturday Superstore __________________ Urb's RYM Stuff Most people sell their soul to the devil, but the devil sells his soul to Nick Cave.

10-11-2006, 02:36 PM	#2 (permalink)
right-track Atchin' Akai Join Date: May 2005 Location: Unamerica Posts: 8,723	Love the title ^

10-11-2006, 02:51 PM	#3 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	I was actually a bit indifferent about it... wondered whether it would sound like I was throwing it in their just to rhyme...what you think of the actual song?

10-11-2006, 03:04 PM	#4 (permalink)
right-track Atchin' Akai Join Date: May 2005 Location: Unamerica Posts: 8,723	Has it got a chorus? If not I like the idea of this being it... Tears in the message centre The old mans been there since December And I know we'll make it in the end I'll try my best and that's all I can give But it's hard when your heads like a sieve... It's hard when your heads like a sieve... And having read it again several times, I have to say the first verse is brilliant. Also, I would have picked the line...Pieces Of A Boy, Shadow Of A Man, as the title, despite liking your pick. It's one of your better ones.

10-11-2006, 03:15 PM	#6 (permalink)
right-track Atchin' Akai Join Date: May 2005 Location: Unamerica Posts: 8,723	^ How I hate Mike Read.