Grey Septembers (work in progress) (The Cure)

TrampInaTux · 09-28-2006, 11:38 AM

We are 2 young people looking for an excuse to rebel
Of course we're gonna be told that it's each other that's giving us hell
But we know differently
in my mind you complete me
You are the questions to my answers
and the cure for all my cancers
Drizzly rain on the conservatory roof
We warm each other and here's our proof
Grey Septembers to grey septembers
Destroying each others youth

sleepy jack · 09-28-2006, 01:48 PM

That was pretty, I didn't really like the "and the cure for all my cancers" that seemed really forced.

~~under~~ · 09-28-2006, 11:11 PM

Hmm...it's not bad. Some of it I liked, like when you said "Destroying eachothers youth" that just brought it up. Keep it up.

either/or · 09-29-2006, 07:38 PM

this is sexy work hobo

09-28-2006, 11:38 AM	#1 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Grey Septembers (work in progress) We are 2 young people looking for an excuse to rebel Of course we're gonna be told that it's each other that's giving us hell But we know differently in my mind you complete me You are the questions to my answers and the cure for all my cancers Drizzly rain on the conservatory roof We warm each other and here's our proof Grey Septembers to grey septembers Destroying each others youth

09-29-2006, 07:38 PM	#4 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	this is sexy work hobo __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

09-28-2006, 11:11 PM	#3 (permalink)
~~under~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 1,056	Hmm...it's not bad. Some of it I liked, like when you said "Destroying eachothers youth" that just brought it up. Keep it up.