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Old 08-26-2006, 06:41 PM   #1 (permalink)
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I was prepared to close the curtain
I saw their lives crashing above me
Nothing could change, of that I was certain
But I was wrong and now I'm feeling so free
Live out your life
As if you will die tonight
The harder you try
The more you fall
And I'm not alone anymore
I've got everyone around me
Not the same as before
But happiness don't come for free
I'm not alone anymore
I've got the ones I love right here
The world's still full of hate, sure
But now there's less too fear
Cos I'm not alone anymore
I was young and things were perfect
Then my life was swept under my feet
Wondering what I did too deserve it
Someone so strong becomes so weak
Live out your life
As if you will die tonight
The harder you try
The more you fall
Don't wanna be alone anymore
I want people around me
My feet stay stuck to the floor
Looking for love in everyone I see
Don't wanna be alone anymore
I want people around me
My feet stay stuck to the floor
Looking for love in everyone I see
Don't wanna be alone anymore
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Old 08-26-2006, 06:43 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I think you should change the last line, I mean its good. But it doesn't really feel like it ends it, if you get my meaning. Its just kind of an average ending. Thats kind of the only thing I havee to add. I liked it.
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