Queens, Don't Fall In Love (Dying Mind Of Royalty) (title, song)

Mama Booze · 08-17-2006, 06:00 PM

A penny for your thoughts...

Reality is out the window when you look through fantasy world.
If you knew you’d live here too.
The queen,
That’s me,
Would say “God willing” to the topic of assassination.

The peons never knew me (no one really knows the queen)
It was possible to rule.
Everyone knows the queen in their mind.
But in their mind everyone is the queen.
(You don’t really wanna be the queen)

One had courage to step inside the dying mind of royalty
I dub thee Love.
Who changed I’s evil ways.
(Don’t really wanna be the queen)

You’ve now left my world heavenless.
A Queendom with a dying mind in power…
An entire world falling to pieces at you’re doing.
I dub thee the thesis of this dying, royal mind.
(You’re still love.)

Queens, don’t fall in love.
Queens, don’t fall in love.
Queens, don’t fall in love.
You don’t really wanna be the queen.
Love will steal your soul.
Love has a price.
Queens, don’t fall in love.
(If smoke was blood I’d want to smother in it.
If alcohol was blood I’d want to drown in it.
God willing.)
The dying mind of royalty at the cost of love.
Queens, don’t fall in love.

explosions-in-my-pants · 08-17-2006, 06:37 PM

its different, its interesting.
the title I thought was best out of all of it.

its the better of most thins you've wrote.
Its easy to tell your writing style is slowly maturing.
the song isn't half bad, its ok.

the only thing I really don't like is,
you say queen like a million times in the song/poem.

Mama Booze · 08-17-2006, 06:43 PM

Oh thank you muchly

08-17-2006, 06:00 PM	#1 (permalink)
Mama Booze Here's lookin at you, kid Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: The White Hotel Posts: 366	Queens, Don't Fall In Love (Dying Mind Of Royalty) A penny for your thoughts... Reality is out the window when you look through fantasy world. If you knew you’d live here too. The queen, That’s me, Would say “God willing” to the topic of assassination. The peons never knew me (no one really knows the queen) It was possible to rule. Everyone knows the queen in their mind. But in their mind everyone is the queen. (You don’t really wanna be the queen) One had courage to step inside the dying mind of royalty I dub thee Love. Who changed I’s evil ways. (Don’t really wanna be the queen) You’ve now left my world heavenless. A Queendom with a dying mind in power… An entire world falling to pieces at you’re doing. I dub thee the thesis of this dying, royal mind. (You’re still love.) Queens, don’t fall in love. Queens, don’t fall in love. Queens, don’t fall in love. You don’t really wanna be the queen. Love will steal your soul. Love has a price. Queens, don’t fall in love. (If smoke was blood I’d want to smother in it. If alcohol was blood I’d want to drown in it. God willing.) The dying mind of royalty at the cost of love. Queens, don’t fall in love.

08-17-2006, 06:37 PM	#2 (permalink)
explosions-in-my-pants angel of tragic days Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 924	its different, its interesting. the title I thought was best out of all of it. its the better of most thins you've wrote. Its easy to tell your writing style is slowly maturing. the song isn't half bad, its ok. the only thing I really don't like is, you say queen like a million times in the song/poem.

08-17-2006, 06:43 PM	#3 (permalink)
Mama Booze Here's lookin at you, kid Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: The White Hotel Posts: 366	Oh thank you muchly