all cause I fell so deep... (quote, song, Alto)

explosions-in-my-pants · 08-10-2006, 09:37 PM

Such a lie,
that everyone but you can see.
You were the boy for me,
and I,
won't get over you.
Trapped so deep, beneath you feet.

What's ya going to do?
Lost control because of you.
Losing all sense of time..so caught up in the thoughts.

I was such a fool for you,
there's no more room for me.
Unhealthy addiction,
no more for me.

It was some time ago
when you left me alone;
I got caught in so deep,
you beat my heart with your fist.

You know there is no use for you,
yet I can't
I can't...
I won't get over you,
cause I love...
Cause I can't
cause fell so deep.
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not sure if I want a course and if I do, I don't what it should be.. help me. thank you.

oh and the bolded black part I don't really like after reading it a few times.. cause it kind of seems like every other song.. but I don't know what else to put there.

Raine · 08-10-2006, 09:41 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by explosions-in-my-pants

Such a lie,
that everyone but you can see.
You were the boy for me,
and I,
won't get over you.
Trapped so deep, beneath you feet.

What's ya going to do?
Lost control because of you.
Losing all sense of time..so caught up in the thoughts.

I was such a fool for you,
there's no more room for me.
Unhealthy addiction,
no more for me.

It was some time ago
when you left me alone;
I got caught in so deep,
you beat my heart with your fist.

You know there is no use for you,
yet I can't
I can't...
I won't get over you,
cause I love...
Cause I can't
cause fell so deep.
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not sure if I want a course and if I do, I don't what it should be.. help me. thank you.

You more or less touch on three different elements of a relationship that a girl wishes existed, but you have nothing to tie them altogether.
There doesn't seem to be much holding your last stanza together. And the last line doesn't seem well thought out

explosions-in-my-pants · 08-10-2006, 09:47 PM

I don't see why any girl would want any of that to be in a relationship.

Raine · 08-10-2006, 09:55 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by explosions-in-my-pants

I don't see why any girl would want any of that to be in a relationship.

what would you rather I call it

explosions-in-my-pants · 08-10-2006, 10:04 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Raine

what would you rather I call it

why would the girl want the guy that broke her heart to know that he really hurt her that much if it doesn't make a difference?
why would she want him to know that she doesn't even TRY to get over him.
she still hopes.
there all pretty much fears that no girl would want there ex boyfriend to know.. thats what everyone knows but him.

Raine · 08-10-2006, 10:14 PM

You didn't answer the question.
I think I know what Urban means

explosions-in-my-pants · 08-10-2006, 10:15 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Raine

You didn't answer the question.

which was?what would you rather I call it

Quote:

I think I know what Urban means

which is suppose to mean? what is Urban saying?

sleepy jack · 08-10-2006, 10:33 PM

1. You're not one to talk about dodging questions.
2. I don't know any girl that would want any of those in her relationship.
3. You made it sound like you were talking about her to urban.
4. Your question was pretty dumb, EIMP was saying she didn't see why anyone wants that in the relationship, you then go what would you rather i call it..like did you even get what she was saying?
5. "I didn't mean to post that particular comment.", do you even think before you post?

Okay, I don't really care for this. The sorrow just seems kind of bland. Its just like, oh im sad...go more in-depth into the misery. This has potential, but it just is kind of weak. A more varied vocabulary would be nice also.

explosions-in-my-pants · 08-10-2006, 10:42 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowquill

1. You're not one to talk about dodging questions.
2. I don't know any girl that would want any of those in her relationship.
3. You made it sound like you were talking about her to urban.
4. Your question was pretty dumb, EIMP was saying she didn't see why anyone wants that in the relationship, you then go what would you rather i call it..like did you even get what she was saying?
5. "I didn't mean to post that particular comment.", do you even think before you post?

that's right, you said it Ethan

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Okay, I don't really care for this. The sorrow just seems kind of bland. Its just like, oh im sad...go more in-depth into the misery. This has potential, but it just is kind of weak. A more varied vocabulary would be nice also.

its weird cause i always post songs (well sometimes) and well I never seem to know how to add and fix or whatever.. might be weird to know but I have like 4 pages of list's of words that i love to use (used to use in writens) and well I had it becaise of my bad spelling and because there words that I would just forget and they work well.. but I lost them.. but I need them.. damn.

Raine · 08-10-2006, 10:44 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Crowquill

4. Your question was pretty dumb, EIMP was saying she didn't see why anyone wants that in the relationship, you then go what would you rather i call it..like did you even get what she was saying?
5. "I didn't mean to post that particular comment.", do you even think before you post?

Yes to the first question, and not always to the second

08-10-2006, 09:37 PM	#1 (permalink)
explosions-in-my-pants angel of tragic days Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 901	all cause I fell so deep... Such a lie, that everyone but you can see. You were the boy for me, and I, won't get over you. Trapped so deep, beneath you feet. What's ya going to do? Lost control because of you. Losing all sense of time..so caught up in the thoughts. I was such a fool for you, there's no more room for me. Unhealthy addiction, no more for me. It was some time ago when you left me alone; I got caught in so deep, you beat my heart with your fist. You know there is no use for you, yet I can't I can't... I won't get over you, cause I love... Cause I can't cause fell so deep. ----------------------------------------------------------------- not sure if I want a course and if I do, I don't what it should be.. help me. thank you. oh and the bolded black part I don't really like after reading it a few times.. cause it kind of seems like every other song.. but I don't know what else to put there.

08-10-2006, 10:14 PM	#6 (permalink)
Raine Full-Time Hellion Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: PA Posts: 1,519	You didn't answer the question. I think I know what Urban means __________________ A pair of powerful spectacles has sometimes sufficed to cure a person in love. ~ Friedrich Nietzsche

08-10-2006, 09:47 PM	#3 (permalink)
explosions-in-my-pants angel of tragic days Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 901	I don't see why any girl would want any of that to be in a relationship.