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08-10-2006, 10:37 PM | #1 (permalink) |
angel of tragic days
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all cause I fell so deep...
Such a lie,
that everyone but you can see. You were the boy for me, and I, won't get over you. Trapped so deep, beneath you feet. What's ya going to do? Lost control because of you. Losing all sense of time..so caught up in the thoughts. I was such a fool for you, there's no more room for me. Unhealthy addiction, no more for me. It was some time ago when you left me alone; I got caught in so deep, you beat my heart with your fist. You know there is no use for you, yet I can't I can't... I won't get over you, cause I love... Cause I can't cause fell so deep. ----------------------------------------------------------------- not sure if I want a course and if I do, I don't what it should be.. help me. thank you. oh and the bolded black part I don't really like after reading it a few times.. cause it kind of seems like every other song.. but I don't know what else to put there. |
08-10-2006, 10:41 PM | #2 (permalink) | |
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There doesn't seem to be much holding your last stanza together. And the last line doesn't seem well thought out
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08-10-2006, 10:55 PM | #4 (permalink) | |
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08-10-2006, 11:04 PM | #5 (permalink) | |
angel of tragic days
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why would she want him to know that she doesn't even TRY to get over him. she still hopes. there all pretty much fears that no girl would want there ex boyfriend to know.. thats what everyone knows but him. |
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08-10-2006, 11:20 PM | #8 (permalink) | ||
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I was just thinking about something he said. I didn't mean to post that particular comment. I just thought about it. Just forget about it
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08-10-2006, 11:23 PM | #9 (permalink) | |
angel of tragic days
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What would I call it.. what every girl wishes would never happen.. or at least wishes it would never get to that point. |
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08-10-2006, 11:24 PM | #10 (permalink) | |
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ah . . you're driving me bonkers woman
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