Heres Something Im Starting On.. (lyrics, Hang)

FailurexByxDesignerxJeans · 08-10-2006, 05:13 PM

just because u guys dont like them. Your not going to try to change my opinion. im not going to stop liking them. because all of u dont like them. I m u have a band that you love that i probably hate and think cant write lyrics for s h i t e.

sleepy jack · 08-10-2006, 05:14 PM

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Originally Posted by FailurexByxDesignerxJeans

just because u guys dont like them. Your not going to try to change my opinion. im not going to stop liking them. because all of u dont like them. I m u have a band that you love that i probably hate and think cant write lyrics for s h i t e.

There lyrics aren't good, these ones aren't good. Quit taking it as a personal attack. I reccomend reading the tips thread, and stuff by hobojesus, crowe, dontrunmeover, either/or and a_perfect_sonnet and trying to find your own voice in writing, not someone elses.

FailurexByxDesignerxJeans · 08-10-2006, 05:24 PM

i know these arent good lyrics. Im just starting out. I dont know if i should take song writing in to consideration. I rether get into art. and drawing. Writing songs is just something i do on my spare time. So i know im not the best. And that was something i wrote. like when i woke up in the moring cuz it hit me. im not using someone elses. if u dont beleive oh. well i tryd

FailurexByxDesignerxJeans · 08-10-2006, 05:25 PM

I read stuff by crowe, his stuff is really good.

right-track · 08-10-2006, 05:41 PM

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Originally Posted by FailurexByxDesignerxJeans

i know these arent good lyrics. Im just starting out. I dont know if i should take song writing in to consideration. I rether get into art. and drawing. Writing songs is just something i do on my spare time. So i know im not the best. And that was something i wrote. like when i woke up in the moring cuz it hit me. im not using someone elses. if u dont beleive oh. well i tryd

Don't be disheartened by a bit of critisism.
Keep at it and prove them wrong.
If you write a good one they'll give you the credit it deserves and you'll improve off the back of it.

The people Crowquill mentioned for you to read up on, have all had their share of critisism in the past.

FailurexByxDesignerxJeans · 08-10-2006, 05:45 PM

im not mad about the critisism
I want them to be honest I thank them for that.
Because I posted it on my bebo page. And lots of ppl said it was really good. The other song i wrote. "masks". But i wanted someone to tell me what i could change. and make it better.

But I just dont like to be told that i dont use my own words. And im coping another band when I know i didnt. thats all.

swim · 08-10-2006, 06:13 PM

I'm not that using other peoples words just overdone ideas. It's cliche.

FailurexByxDesignerxJeans · 08-10-2006, 06:18 PM

well i see what you mean tho.

~~Rabid Sea Turtles~~ · 08-10-2006, 09:02 PM

Howcome whenever someone is given an honest, negative opinion on their writing, they always feel the need to say something like "I'm just starting, so I know the lyrics aren't good" or "I just write when I'm bored"?

If you thought the lyrics sucked, you wouldn't post them.

Trauma · 08-10-2006, 10:21 PM

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Originally Posted by FailurexByxDesignerxJeans

Its no where near finished. I just want to know if its a good start. Or what i can change.

Verse 1

Im a Disoriented Teen
With a lot of Hate
I live my life without
breathing day to day
drowned by my own anxiety
I tend to cut my own throat

start of chorus

Strangled by the same line
that you slashed off once more..

It sounds like garbage
Much too cliche

08-10-2006, 05:13 PM	#11 (permalink)
FailurexByxDesignerxJeans Music Addict Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: I Panic! At the Disco [[yesh]] Posts: 58	just because u guys dont like them. Your not going to try to change my opinion. im not going to stop liking them. because all of u dont like them. I m u have a band that you love that i probably hate and think cant write lyrics for s h i t e. __________________ I'm a mess of insecurities Attention starved with a narcissistic twist Don't you think that I'm amazing? Please tell me I'm worth dating I have every reason not to leave home today

08-10-2006, 05:24 PM	#13 (permalink)
FailurexByxDesignerxJeans Music Addict Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: I Panic! At the Disco [[yesh]] Posts: 58	i know these arent good lyrics. Im just starting out. I dont know if i should take song writing in to consideration. I rether get into art. and drawing. Writing songs is just something i do on my spare time. So i know im not the best. And that was something i wrote. like when i woke up in the moring cuz it hit me. im not using someone elses. if u dont beleive oh. well i tryd __________________ I'm a mess of insecurities Attention starved with a narcissistic twist Don't you think that I'm amazing? Please tell me I'm worth dating I have every reason not to leave home today

08-10-2006, 05:25 PM	#14 (permalink)
FailurexByxDesignerxJeans Music Addict Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: I Panic! At the Disco [[yesh]] Posts: 58	I read stuff by crowe, his stuff is really good. __________________ I'm a mess of insecurities Attention starved with a narcissistic twist Don't you think that I'm amazing? Please tell me I'm worth dating I have every reason not to leave home today

08-10-2006, 05:45 PM	#16 (permalink)
FailurexByxDesignerxJeans Music Addict Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: I Panic! At the Disco [[yesh]] Posts: 58	im not mad about the critisism I want them to be honest I thank them for that. Because I posted it on my bebo page. And lots of ppl said it was really good. The other song i wrote. "masks". But i wanted someone to tell me what i could change. and make it better. But I just dont like to be told that i dont use my own words. And im coping another band when I know i didnt. thats all. __________________ I'm a mess of insecurities Attention starved with a narcissistic twist Don't you think that I'm amazing? Please tell me I'm worth dating I have every reason not to leave home today

08-10-2006, 06:13 PM	#17 (permalink)
swim dontcareaboutyou Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: North Carolina Posts: 5,188	I'm not that using other peoples words just overdone ideas. It's cliche. __________________ http://nakednaps.bandcamp.com/

08-10-2006, 06:18 PM	#18 (permalink)
FailurexByxDesignerxJeans Music Addict Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: I Panic! At the Disco [[yesh]] Posts: 58	well i see what you mean tho. __________________ I'm a mess of insecurities Attention starved with a narcissistic twist Don't you think that I'm amazing? Please tell me I'm worth dating I have every reason not to leave home today

08-10-2006, 09:02 PM	#19 (permalink)
~~Rabid Sea Turtles~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: In the sea... Posts: 252	Howcome whenever someone is given an honest, negative opinion on their writing, they always feel the need to say something like "I'm just starting, so I know the lyrics aren't good" or "I just write when I'm bored"? If you thought the lyrics sucked, you wouldn't post them.