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08-01-2006, 06:17 PM
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Here's lookin at you, kid
Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: The White Hotel
Posts: 366
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Please no arguments...
just a simple "yes" or "no" will do just fine, I'm really not in the mood to argue (I just gave you a great advantage, didn't I? Haa.......)
------- You walk through the door She doesn’t know where you’ve been She’s too kind… Too in love to ask. You see her smile when you walk in. Your heart brakes… That’s the first time for her all day… How could you do it? She told you you’re the reason… The reason she’s here right now. She tries to say to herself…, It’s work. Maybe traffic… But her own deeper thoughts may soon drive her insane. (La, la, la, la, la, la, la, la, la…love is blind. La, la, la, la, la, la, la, la…love is blind.) You kiss her hello She grabs a hold… Pulling you in. Her heart’s been aching all day long. She needs you, dear. Feeling very empty… (La, la, la, la…love is blind. La, la, la, la…love is blind.) Fill me up, She’s begging you. You start to cry, Because love is blind. |
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08-01-2006, 06:19 PM
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Account Disabled
Join Date: Feb 2006
Location: In the sea...
Posts: 252
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So you don't want anyone to give their opinions on the song, you just want them to put a yes or a no?
I strongly doubt your thread will play out that way. If you don't want an opinion, then don't post it on a public forum. |
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08-01-2006, 07:56 PM
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isfckingdead
Join Date: Nov 2004
Posts: 18,967
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"Your heart brakes…", is spelled "breaks". The song is weak, its basically the equivalent of writing a poem about suicide and going "im sad, i want to die so i died", explain the emotion if you're going to write a song like this. I don't like it, its a completely boring song.
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08-01-2006, 08:28 PM
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Music Addict
Join Date: Jul 2006
Location: new jersey
Posts: 48
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if youre not willing to have your work criticized... dont post it. its kind of stupid imo to post lyrics and not have the reviewers explain themselves
the song is rather dull, it doesn't seem to have much behind it in simpler terms, "NO" ...but i like the lalalalala part, im not going to lie... |
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08-01-2006, 11:43 PM
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Full-Time Hellion
Join Date: Nov 2004
Location: PA
Posts: 1,531
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No.
Your very last line was a cliche. The idea is so unoriginal and very played out. You're very vague. This song has nothing going for it. As for the simple yes or no answer thing: smoke some weed. You posted this because you wanted our opinion of your work. There isn't a debate or argument. You either live with our criticism or die because you dont' like it. It means nothing to us how you take it. But I take an even bigger offense to it because it was a waste of time. Not that I'm doing anything important at the moment anyway but it's still a waste of effort reading this. No offense to your skills as a writer or anything.
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08-01-2006, 11:57 PM
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probably basic
Join Date: Jul 2006
Location: not with you.
Posts: 86
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NO.
weak lyrics
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'Cause that's all that you'll get so you'll have to accept
You are here then you're gone But I believe that lovers should be tied together and Thrown into the ocean in the worst of weather and left there to drown |
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