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08-01-2006, 01:45 PM | #1 (permalink) |
that's my war face.
Join Date: Nov 2005
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This is a unusually long warning.
Hey Kid
You're another hybrid Televisual images cinematic collages Regroup to bring you down but this is a teenage protest You hope that they've all noticed Hey son Tell me what's your problem Living your life through a lens Giving them all time to defend You need to catch them unawares my friend In your teenage protest Your teenage protest CHORUS Don't make a sound Talking is giving in Unallowed To mingle with your kin Don't let this get under your skin Don't make a sound Talking is giving in Unallowed To mingle with your kin Don't let this get under your skin Under your skin Hey Kid Look at what God did Unmistakeable mistake Now you're left to carry the weight The world is in such a state Continue to protest And hope the world will notice Hey girl Come out of your downward spiral He needs some happiness for a while You can be his 3 month trial The juice to make his brain go wild Part of his protest Make them all notice CHORUS Don't make a sound Talking is giving in Unallowed To mingle with your kin Don't let this get under your skin Don't make a sound Talking is giving in Unallowed To mingle with your kin Don't let this get under your skin Under your skin |
08-02-2006, 02:10 AM | #2 (permalink) |
Don't think twice
Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: A basement on the hill
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nice. you've gotten alot better.
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08-02-2006, 05:05 AM | #4 (permalink) |
Scarf
Join Date: May 2006
Location: Brighton, UK
Posts: 715
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It could be nice, but I don't think you should sing the chorus twice each time, drop the second half, and either make the chorus longer, or leave it. I think that'd sound better.
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