Dalley Arkway (Kiss, quote, 60s, song, Hang)

TrampInaTux · 07-28-2006, 05:50 AM

My wherabouts
unknown to you
the monkey that sits on your shoulder
isn't telling the truth
My broken home
lights turned off
Squeezing her throat like a lemon
I enjoy her splutters and coughs
Never mind
I sigh, oh well
Justice is a dish best served
with a side order of hell

CHORUS
Kiss me (Repeat x4)
Kiss me Kiss me, Kiss me

Under my coat
Beneath your dress
The monkey that sits on your shoulder
is just trying to impress
Speed and pain
Drive me insane
with lust, not love-well, love for the chase
Love for the game

CHORUS
Kiss me (Repeat x4)
Kiss me Kiss me, Kiss me

Ooo I forgot to add my thoughts on this song... basically it's a song about an insane bloke who hangs out in Dark Alleyways. It's messed up, it's not very nice, it's dark but c'mon...please like it

explosions-in-my-pants · 07-28-2006, 10:38 AM

I really like all of it besides the chorus. I think you shouold keep the first 'kiss me' and then where the other's are just put something else to repeat 4x times haha..but other then that i think its really good. Good Job!

swim · 08-04-2006, 10:25 PM

It's oddness is appealing.

Ace · 08-04-2006, 10:49 PM

I think it could have potential.....I'd just change monkey, to bird. Maybe add a line about how the bird whispers in the person's ear. Overall it's nice.

Blain · 08-04-2006, 11:43 PM

This has more of a 60's type feel to it, I mean squeezing her throat like a lemon? and the chorus... I like all of it, but just those lines, keep the chorus if you want but that lemon one just erks me

Good job anyway

explosions-in-my-pants · 08-05-2006, 01:10 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Blainka

This has more of a 60's type feel to it, I mean squeezing her throat like a lemon? and the chorus... I like all of it, but just those lines, keep the chorus if you want but that lemon one just erks me

Good job anyway

you mean liek van morrison, mama's and the papas, 60s hippy love summer thing...

07-28-2006, 05:50 AM	#1 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Dalley Arkway My wherabouts unknown to you the monkey that sits on your shoulder isn't telling the truth My broken home lights turned off Squeezing her throat like a lemon I enjoy her splutters and coughs Never mind I sigh, oh well Justice is a dish best served with a side order of hell CHORUS Kiss me (Repeat x4) Kiss me Kiss me, Kiss me Under my coat Beneath your dress The monkey that sits on your shoulder is just trying to impress Speed and pain Drive me insane with lust, not love-well, love for the chase Love for the game CHORUS Kiss me (Repeat x4) Kiss me Kiss me, Kiss me Ooo I forgot to add my thoughts on this song... basically it's a song about an insane bloke who hangs out in Dark Alleyways. It's messed up, it's not very nice, it's dark but c'mon...please like it

08-04-2006, 10:25 PM	#3 (permalink)
swim dontcareaboutyou Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: North Carolina Posts: 5,188	It's oddness is appealing. __________________ http://nakednaps.bandcamp.com/

07-28-2006, 10:38 AM	#2 (permalink)
explosions-in-my-pants angel of tragic days Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 924	I really like all of it besides the chorus. I think you shouold keep the first 'kiss me' and then where the other's are just put something else to repeat 4x times haha..but other then that i think its really good. Good Job!

08-04-2006, 11:43 PM	#5 (permalink)
Blain w0rd Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Suva, Fiji Posts: 1,034	This has more of a 60's type feel to it, I mean squeezing her throat like a lemon? and the chorus... I like all of it, but just those lines, keep the chorus if you want but that lemon one just erks me Good job anyway