creepinson

Red sky at night
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I was screaming and kneeling
Subsiding and sealing
My feet in the ground
Now I’ll never be found

And you told me

There’s something more to this hurt
Than a friend in the dirt
More than water in rain
More than blood in this stain

And you were wrong

I could see we both knew why,
As the sky seemed to fly by

(Chorus)
I kept my
Feet in the ground
And my friend in the dirt
Now we’ll never be found
But loneliness is worse

I like to think you taught me something
About pity
That it is nothing more for you
Than to hold onto

Something to hold as grief whispers in my ear
As this pity, your stability
Holds me near

(Chorus)

And now you’re underground

And you are dead
And you are dead
And life is dead
And life is dead

My life is dead

But I’ll always be here

With my
Feet in the ground
And my soul in the dirt
Though I’ll never be found
I will cherish this curse
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wow i havent been on here for awhile... whatever guys you know the drill c4c and all that cwazy jazz, i got this song from re-writing another, although im not sure if i had posted the original song on here before... man it was crap

sleepy jack

I like to think you taught me something
About pity
That it is nothing more for you
Than to hold onto

I like that bit, it was good.

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Rabid Sea Turtles

I like this, nice flow.
The rhyming sounded forced in one or two places, but over all it was very good.

Oh, and, Ethan, out of curiosity, why is that tdoc quote in your sig?

sleepy jack

Because it amuses me.

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Raine

I liked it. Not too visual but descriptive enough that you could imagine this going on.
It reminds mea litle of that song by Eminem. I think it's called Skeletons in the Closet or probably something to that effect

Pretty cool actually.

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A pair of powerful spectacles has sometimes sufficed to cure a person in love.

~ Friedrich Nietzsche