Angel Dust (lyrics, title)

IrishWhiskey · 07-25-2006, 10:59 PM

I'm relatively new here, but I decided to post some of my lyrics anyway. I have all my lyrics saved onto one Word file, and I just took the first one on the list and posted it. Your suggestions are appreciated!

Angel Dust

Diving into the mystic depths of thought and space and time
The celestial enigmas shun my sweet sublime
My swirling thoughts, long bereft with intrusion
The silent doldrums in my head

The eloquent cascading of an ethereal serenity
Isolation of this sentimental tranquility
Eyes wide closed, sailing far beyond illusion
Sitting on the roof, yet soaring overhead

With the detrius of angels sprinkled on my shoulders
The penetrating stare of the stars, swirling blurs
Drowning in the moon's everlasting gaze
Yet the zenith of my prayers falls far below
The mystic depths of thought and space and time and shadow.

Raine · 07-26-2006, 07:30 AM

I like the title.

It does make sense I suppos. There is no one real dominent rhyme scheme although I somehow doubt that's what you were going for anyway.
There's just something about it I don't like.

But it does sound pretty . . . kinda enigmatic though. Very enigmatic.

07-25-2006, 10:59 PM	#1 (permalink)
IrishWhiskey Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: new jersey Posts: 48	Angel Dust I'm relatively new here, but I decided to post some of my lyrics anyway. I have all my lyrics saved onto one Word file, and I just took the first one on the list and posted it. Your suggestions are appreciated! Angel Dust Diving into the mystic depths of thought and space and time The celestial enigmas shun my sweet sublime My swirling thoughts, long bereft with intrusion The silent doldrums in my head The eloquent cascading of an ethereal serenity Isolation of this sentimental tranquility Eyes wide closed, sailing far beyond illusion Sitting on the roof, yet soaring overhead With the detrius of angels sprinkled on my shoulders The penetrating stare of the stars, swirling blurs Drowning in the moon's everlasting gaze Yet the zenith of my prayers falls far below The mystic depths of thought and space and time and shadow.

07-26-2006, 07:30 AM	#2 (permalink)
Raine Full-Time Hellion Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: PA Posts: 1,531	I like the title. It does make sense I suppos. There is no one real dominent rhyme scheme although I somehow doubt that's what you were going for anyway. There's just something about it I don't like. But it does sound pretty . . . kinda enigmatic though. Very enigmatic. __________________ A pair of powerful spectacles has sometimes sufficed to cure a person in love. ~ Friedrich Nietzsche