GI germs

Well
My dreams, they show too much
My heart is still pumping
But my bodies numb
The piece is there
But it just won’t fit
I can see the horizon
and I want no part in it

Oh, tomorrow
(tomorrow)
I’ll be hollow
You’ve borrowed too much
Sorry, sorry about that

I said “whatever”
I think the script gets worse
As I walk on with the weather
And I think someone is sleeping
I just hope they’ll wake up
When I need it

I don’t know what I’ve seen
But it bothers me
I can’t bear to see it again
And so I don’t sleep
Maybe my guesses are right
I just hope that I’m Insane

(1,2,3)
Oh, tomorrow
(tomorrow)
I’ll be hollow
You’ve borrowed too much
Sorry, sorry about that

Sorry, sorry I can’t understand

I’m so sorry because I’m freaked out
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yea or nay?

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mmmmm....endorphins.

sleepy jack

"And I think someone is sleeping" Take out the "and" there, it sounds better without it. I liked it, like it was simple but not like, simple in the "wow this is stupid" kind of way.

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Raine

I didn't like your very last line or your second to last stanza.
Otherwise I liked it. (A lot)

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A pair of powerful spectacles has sometimes sufficed to cure a person in love.

~ Friedrich Nietzsche