The Tramp Champ--or?
 

The Tramp Champ –really don’t have a proper title—suggestions?
(male vocal) :tramp: oline
© annie 2006 re-write below1.)
It’s a quarter to nine
And I’ve just finished - a bottle of wine.
Didn’t know how much I was hurting
Seems-- there’s no more fun
I should buy -another one
And then I might forget your fllirting.

Ch)
Sometimes you’d act like a tramp
And wouldn’t know who you’d been doing
But that’s not the same as a vamp
When you and me were billing and cooing
And you’d say let’s turn on the lamp
and ourselves with the viewing

2.)
Now it’s one thirty-one
Just noticed another - bottle is done
Oh boy this is trou-ou-ble
I don’t even feel drunk
But sure in a funk,
‘Cuz I’m sure seeing dou-ou-ble

Ch)

3.)
Bet you’re with someone new
Too many others have flo-own the coop
Your reputation’s expanding
The talk of the town
The gossip goes round
And there’s not a good man left standing


Ch)
Sometimes you’d act like a tramp
And wouldn’t know who you’d been doing
But that’s not the same as a vamp
When you and me were billing and cooing
I’ll declare you the champ
And just leave you stewing

TAG)
Yeah I’ll declare you the champ
And just leave you stewing!

any remarks for me--or is it THAT baD?

The last two lines of the chorus 'and you say let's turn........' doesn't sound as good as the 'i declare you the champ........'
i'm having a bit of trouble identifying the hook though- could the tag but not sure?????

thank you wordiva

I do believe you are right. I like that better too. Will rework it!

thank you :beer:

was thinking about a title and this popped in.
this one is a bit long winded but yea; 'drinking away the tramp?'

It's a bit bland. It seems kinda like a lot of it was written just so that it would rhyme. The story seems forced. It's alright as a start, but it could definitely use some revision, mainly revision of the storyline.

The Champ
© annie 2006
1.)
It’s a quarter to nine
And I’ve just finished a bottle of wine.
Didn’t know how much I was reacting
Seems nothing is fun
So I’ll drink another one
To forget your on-street transactions

Ch
I’ll declare you the champ
In being a tramp
You don’t often know who you’re doing
Now you’re not the sweet chick
When you and I clicked
And we were kissin' and cooing

2.)
Now it’s one thirty-one
Just noticed this second bottle is done
Oh boy this is trou-ou-ble
I ‘m feelinig drunk
In one hell of a funk,
‘Cuz I’m sure seeing dou-ou-ble

Ch)

3.)
Bet you’re with someone new
Many others have flo-own the coop
Your reputation can’t be transcended
The talk of the town
As gossip goes round
What you start, we all know, is soon ended!

Ch)
I’ll declare you the champ
In being a tramp
You don’t often know who you’re doing
Now you’re not the sweet chick
When you and I clicked
And we were kissin' and cooing

TAG) Yeah I’ll declare you the champ