Needs title! (track, song)

angel18 · 05-21-2006, 06:47 AM

I wrote this today, but haven't been able to think of a suitable title? Any suggestions much appreciated!

[V1]
Be prepared for my inspections
Be ready to tell me your confessions
Don't be afraid of what I might think
If your eyes hurt make sure they blink.

[Chorus]
Because I'm gonna make myself clear
Stadn up and walk over here to me
I know that I fill you with fear
That why I want you to see.

[V2]
Rub the dust from your eyes
Clean your face and put on your disguise
Show me you're a fake man
Take the time to make your plan.

[Chorus]

[Bridge]
Try and see if you'll push me away
I just don't have the patience anymore
I ain't going anywhere today
So wait for me at the front door.

[Chorus]

Crazy Luv · 05-22-2006, 07:21 PM

Get ready?

Be prepared?

swim · 05-22-2006, 08:23 PM

My suggestion is listen to folk music. Seriosly. Pete Seeger, Bob Dylan, Nick Drake stuff like that or read a good book or something. Go get substance somewhere, anywhere. It's so generic.

Crazy Luv · 05-22-2006, 08:30 PM

Ahh, i listened to Bob Dylan in class, horrible voice, but the way he did it...amazing. I was listening to the song Hurricane.

swim · 05-22-2006, 08:31 PM

His voice can grow on you, I didnt like it at first. He's a pure genious song writer.

Crazy Luv · 05-22-2006, 08:35 PM

Hmm, cant disagree with that.

His song Hurricane is about something serious, but when i listen to it i get the sense of going on a road trip. Rushing, driving, chillin, conflicts all mixed together.

swim · 05-22-2006, 08:41 PM

Good song. He's one of the most up beat folk song writers I know of. That's part of the attraction for me.

getting_there · 05-26-2006, 04:54 PM

Hey angel

I think I know the guy you wrote about

Is this him?

GT
**************
You’re a Grain of Salt

1,)
I doubt you’ll pass inspection
When I demand your confession
I’ll still tell you what I think
When you lie, you never blink
2.)
You’ll be wearing your disguise
That’s fooled the gals and the guys
A poor excuse for a man
But now I see your selfish scam

CH)
I’ll make it clear
That what I hear
I’ll take with a grain of salt
Don’t call me dear
You’re not sincere
I was gullible to a fault.
You’re a grain of salt!

3.)
As I plan this confrontation
More and more I feel frustration
I think you know I’m on to you
And afraid of what I’ll do
4.)
Like expose you to your friends
They never accept your amends
You’ve been cruel and played them too
The end of you is overdue.

CH)
I’ll make it clear
That what I hear
I’ll take with a grain of salt
Don’t call me dear
You’re not sincere
I was gullible to a fault.
You’re a grain of salt!
****

This could also have a bridge between the 4th verse adn the chorus-- sp[litting off to more details??

Good Luck

hope I was on track?!!

GT aka annie

05-21-2006, 06:47 AM	#1 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	Needs title! I wrote this today, but haven't been able to think of a suitable title? Any suggestions much appreciated! [V1] Be prepared for my inspections Be ready to tell me your confessions Don't be afraid of what I might think If your eyes hurt make sure they blink. [Chorus] Because I'm gonna make myself clear Stadn up and walk over here to me I know that I fill you with fear That why I want you to see. [V2] Rub the dust from your eyes Clean your face and put on your disguise Show me you're a fake man Take the time to make your plan. [Chorus] [Bridge] Try and see if you'll push me away I just don't have the patience anymore I ain't going anywhere today So wait for me at the front door. [Chorus]

05-22-2006, 08:23 PM	#3 (permalink)
swim dontcareaboutyou Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: North Carolina Posts: 5,188	My suggestion is listen to folk music. Seriosly. Pete Seeger, Bob Dylan, Nick Drake stuff like that or read a good book or something. Go get substance somewhere, anywhere. It's so generic. __________________ http://nakednaps.bandcamp.com/

05-22-2006, 08:31 PM	#5 (permalink)
swim dontcareaboutyou Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: North Carolina Posts: 5,188	His voice can grow on you, I didnt like it at first. He's a pure genious song writer. __________________ http://nakednaps.bandcamp.com/

05-22-2006, 08:41 PM	#7 (permalink)
swim dontcareaboutyou Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: North Carolina Posts: 5,188	Good song. He's one of the most up beat folk song writers I know of. That's part of the attraction for me. __________________ http://nakednaps.bandcamp.com/

05-22-2006, 07:21 PM	#2 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	Get ready? Be prepared?

05-22-2006, 08:30 PM	#4 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	Ahh, i listened to Bob Dylan in class, horrible voice, but the way he did it...amazing. I was listening to the song Hurricane.

05-22-2006, 08:35 PM	#6 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	Hmm, cant disagree with that. His song Hurricane is about something serious, but when i listen to it i get the sense of going on a road trip. Rushing, driving, chillin, conflicts all mixed together.

05-26-2006, 04:54 PM	#8 (permalink)
getting_there Groupie Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Canada Posts: 29	Hey angel I think I know the guy you wrote about Is this him? GT ************ You’re a Grain of Salt 1,) I doubt you’ll pass inspection When I demand your confession I’ll still tell you what I think When you lie, you never blink 2.) You’ll be wearing your disguise That’s fooled the gals and the guys A poor excuse for a man But now I see your selfish scam CH) I’ll make it clear That what I hear I’ll take with a grain of salt Don’t call me dear You’re not sincere I was gullible to a fault. You’re a grain of salt! 3.) As I plan this confrontation More and more I feel frustration I think you know I’m on to you And afraid of what I’ll do 4.) Like expose you to your friends They never accept your amends You’ve been cruel and played them too The end of you is overdue. CH) I’ll make it clear That what I hear I’ll take with a grain of salt Don’t call me dear You’re not sincere I was gullible to a fault. You’re a grain of salt! ** This could also have a bridge between the 4th verse adn the chorus-- sp[litting off to more details?? Good Luck hope I was on track?!! GT aka annie