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05-02-2006, 10:33 PM | #1 (permalink) |
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been so long, I'm back.... : No Story Ends
something got me thinking how long the universe will last? but then again, it's might last forever, as long ppl keeping the universe alive... so enjoy ^_^
No Story Ends I can see that you not what you seem And I can believe that the fear get the best of us No one know for sure until I get through Time, I can tell but the clock hasn't start ticking Find a place where we hide the source I always carry on even though my World half asleep Doesn't matter where or when Under the rain they weeps Promises either can be made or can be broken Dawn or dusk, sun will be awaken Life has too much sadness and too much happiness But it time to flip the page Long ago when life are primitive the wars will never ends The challenging in life is the battle of each mind Pure has become impure and good has become evil it matter by the aura of the very spirit It can't be understand by the two sides but commonly we know it has no ending whatsoever it just can't be stop and you know the saying No story ends People thought I'm legendary even though I'm not I cannot be the best if few things can't be proved Here I am sitting time to time on the black grassland as I feel the mood In my mind, I know I'm desperate In my heart it's the beginning of something new Doesn't feel like it but that was it But it time to rewrite the page Short later when life not primitive, the wars always ends The challenging in life is the battle of each hearts Impure has become pure and evil has become good it matter by the aura of the very spirit It can be understand by the two sides but commonly we don't know it has ending evermore it just can be stop and you know the saying No story ever ends As now I need to know But the time like this I have to go Days move on at speed of light But as slowly when at night Many things are opposite but commonly in the end they has no ending Long ago when life are primitive the wars will never ends The challenging in life is the battle of each mind Pure has become impure and good has become evil it matter by the aura of the very spirit It can't be understand by the two sides but commonly we know it has no ending whatsoever it just can't be stop and you know the saying No story end Long ago when life are primitive the wars will never ends The challenging in life is the battle of each mind Pure has become impure and good has become evil it matter by the aura of the very spirit It can't be understand by the two sides but commonly we know it has no ending whatsoever it just can't be stop and you know the saying No story ends I can see that you not what you seem And I can believe that the fear get the best of us No one know for sure until I get through Time, I can tell but the clock hasn't start ticking Find a place where we hide the source…. |
05-02-2006, 11:35 PM | #4 (permalink) |
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Is this a joke? I'm not trying to be rude... but this seems like some sort of contrived gimmick. If it isn't I'm sorry... but... uh... I don't know - can I get an answer? If it isn't - try and pick up a little grammar crash course somewhere... tips you=your in some cases... I don't think I want to go and point them all out. I think it's somewhat odd that you can piece together some of the more complex thoughts ... I don't know...
However, if this is a real attempt at putting your songs/poetry up here for critique... you can't just shut down someone's critique by throwing an ambiguous number at them. How do YOU know he hasn't been doing this for 7 or more years? Be careful... |
05-03-2006, 09:51 AM | #5 (permalink) |
a l'amou fou pou tout
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Too damn long & it feels like your just blabbing away, not so much feeling. But if there is...well, i dont get no emotion from this. Cut this done or something.
And what do you know, you haven't been doing this for 7 years, ah!...c'mon mane, thats just a stupidass ****ed up thing to say. tsk tsk tsk |
05-04-2006, 08:09 PM | #7 (permalink) | |
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& again, for gods sake, cut this damn thing down to size, c'mon now. |
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05-06-2006, 09:01 PM | #8 (permalink) |
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well, ppl just have different passions, for me I wrote 35 lyrics with emotions, moods, eperiences and predictiments. ppl learns what their ways to write, you can't assumed it's wrong, I wrote it this way, it's can't be wrong.
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05-07-2006, 06:17 PM | #10 (permalink) | |
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Obviously you just wanted us to praise your work, not give advice, so go somewhere with yourself. |
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