HAHAHAHAHA (I'm proud of this one.....READ) (albums, title, band)

TrampInaTux · 05-02-2006, 02:40 PM

I'm trying my best but she just can't see it
I should cut out my rest I'm starting to get unfit
Here goes my new day with a brand new job
with a boss that hates my guts
C'mon people make a fuss of me

CHORUS
It's me birthday
Happy ****ing birthday
on a work day
Poxey ****ing work day
It's me birthday
Happy ****ing birthday
on a work day
poxey ****ing work day
Oh happy birthday to me

I stomp back home for a powernap
and I get divorce papers thrown on my lap
What a nice present, thank you dear
You don't need to explain the message is pretty clear
you all just have a ****ing problem

CHORUS
It's me birthday
Happy ****ing birthday
on a work day
poxey ****ing work day
it's me birthday
happy ****ing birthday
on a work day
poxey ****ing work day
Oh happy birthday to me

I got a parking fine for fifty quid
the cats got in the dustbin I never closed the lid
My laptop broke I've lost all the work I've did
my ex-lesbian-wife is pregnant with my kid
You try and tell me you had a worse day

CHORUS
It's me birthday
Happy ****ing birthday
on a work day
poxey ****ing work day
it's me birthday
happy ****ing birthday
on a work day
poxey ****ing work day
Oh happy birthday to me

Like the title says, I'm proud of this one. Any ways I can make it better? This is one I'm seriously thinking about keeping for the long haul when I try and follow my dreams of being in a band.

ArmyofMe · 05-02-2006, 02:43 PM

LOL, I can't think of anything to go along with this, but nice job!

getting_there · 05-03-2006, 01:26 AM

Maybe a few too many F******* for commercial use?

GT

TrampInaTux · 05-03-2006, 01:28 AM

Commercialisation can suck my ****ing balls.

Crazy Luv · 05-03-2006, 09:56 AM

I like the stanzas(except the last lines in each), but i dont like the chorus.

angel18 · 05-04-2006, 10:39 AM

i agree with crazy luv some of the last lines for the stanzas just don't go right for me

MURDER JUNKIE · 05-04-2006, 10:51 AM

It would be awesome if sung by this guy:

The loveable loser

explosions-in-my-pants · 05-04-2006, 03:41 PM

i don't like this at all hobo, if ****ing wasn't even there it would seem like a very catchy annoying music channel song.. that would get annoying fast to many lsiteners... i think its the chourse personally thay just bugs me. and then the second last lines before the ending of the last chourse just seems well like rap?

~~under~~ · 05-04-2006, 07:27 PM

*sighs* oh well I guess this song will have to be sang by the loveable loser indeed.

~~under~~ · 05-04-2006, 07:29 PM

It could also be sang by the loveable loser brother....but ugly

05-02-2006, 02:40 PM	#1 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	HAHAHAHAHA (I'm proud of this one.....READ) I'm trying my best but she just can't see it I should cut out my rest I'm starting to get unfit Here goes my new day with a brand new job with a boss that hates my guts C'mon people make a fuss of me CHORUS It's me birthday Happy **ing birthday on a work day Poxey ing work day It's me birthday Happy ing birthday on a work day poxey ing work day Oh happy birthday to me I stomp back home for a powernap and I get divorce papers thrown on my lap What a nice present, thank you dear You don't need to explain the message is pretty clear you all just have a ing problem CHORUS It's me birthday Happy ing birthday on a work day poxey ing work day it's me birthday happy ing birthday on a work day poxey ing work day Oh happy birthday to me I got a parking fine for fifty quid the cats got in the dustbin I never closed the lid My laptop broke I've lost all the work I've did my ex-lesbian-wife is pregnant with my kid You try and tell me you had a worse day CHORUS It's me birthday Happy ing birthday on a work day poxey ing work day it's me birthday happy ing birthday on a work day poxey **ing work day Oh happy birthday to me Like the title says, I'm proud of this one. Any ways I can make it better? This is one I'm seriously thinking about keeping for the long haul when I try and follow my dreams of being in a band.

05-02-2006, 02:43 PM	#2 (permalink)
ArmyofMe mhmm Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: ummm... Posts: 72	LOL, I can't think of anything to go along with this, but nice job! __________________ bah..

05-03-2006, 01:26 AM	#3 (permalink)
getting_there Groupie Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Canada Posts: 29	Maybe a few too many F******* for commercial use? GT

05-03-2006, 01:28 AM	#4 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Commercialisation can suck my ****ing balls.

05-03-2006, 09:56 AM	#5 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	I like the stanzas(except the last lines in each), but i dont like the chorus.

05-04-2006, 10:39 AM	#6 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	i agree with crazy luv some of the last lines for the stanzas just don't go right for me

05-04-2006, 10:51 AM	#7 (permalink)
MURDER JUNKIE The Wetter The Better!! Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: SH1TTY London Ontario Canada Posts: 2,504	It would be awesome if sung by this guy: The loveable loser

05-04-2006, 03:41 PM	#8 (permalink)
explosions-in-my-pants angel of tragic days Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 924	i don't like this at all hobo, if ****ing wasn't even there it would seem like a very catchy annoying music channel song.. that would get annoying fast to many lsiteners... i think its the chourse personally thay just bugs me. and then the second last lines before the ending of the last chourse just seems well like rap?

05-04-2006, 07:27 PM	#9 (permalink)
~~under~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 1,056	sighs oh well I guess this song will have to be sang by the loveable loser indeed.

05-04-2006, 07:29 PM	#10 (permalink)
~~under~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 1,056	It could also be sang by the loveable loser brother....but ugly