Seems... (member, memories)

Crazy Luv · 05-01-2006, 09:19 PM

Remember the promises we vowed for forever
Seems as if now they're just buryed treasure
It seems as if you turned on me
How could we create this rivalry
The memories, they float along the wind
It's unusual how our secrets still circulate within

Here's something to sing-along
Here's something to remember
'Til the end of many decembers
There are parts that were mistold
There are parts we should have known
Because, we were that close

We're both not ready for this alliance to end
Seems as if those thoughts are strangely comdemned
It's wrong to move on from such a bond left uncomplete
Which is the cause for me writing with this pen and sheet
But it's to late, to late, is what we are foretold
But it's the heart, the heart, promises is what it holds

Here’s something to sing-along
Here’s something to think about
Somethings you'll even try to doubt
There are things that are mistold
There are things that need to be disclosed
Because, we were that close

angel18 · 05-02-2006, 04:24 AM

i think this is good, probably one of your best so far!

Nikie Pentagram · 05-02-2006, 11:39 AM

Really good, apart from the fact that it's `foretold` not `fortold` I see nothing wrong with this whatsoever. Bloody brill'!

Crazy Luv · 05-03-2006, 09:41 AM

Thank you guys for the comments.

And thank you Nikie for noticing that, never knew there was a E in it

05-01-2006, 09:19 PM	#1 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	Seems... Remember the promises we vowed for forever Seems as if now they're just buryed treasure It seems as if you turned on me How could we create this rivalry The memories, they float along the wind It's unusual how our secrets still circulate within Here's something to sing-along Here's something to remember 'Til the end of many decembers There are parts that were mistold There are parts we should have known Because, we were that close We're both not ready for this alliance to end Seems as if those thoughts are strangely comdemned It's wrong to move on from such a bond left uncomplete Which is the cause for me writing with this pen and sheet But it's to late, to late, is what we are foretold But it's the heart, the heart, promises is what it holds Here’s something to sing-along Here’s something to think about Somethings you'll even try to doubt There are things that are mistold There are things that need to be disclosed Because, we were that close

05-02-2006, 11:39 AM	#3 (permalink)
Nikie Pentagram Shpongled Lunatic Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Shropshire, UK Posts: 55	Really good, apart from the fact that it's `foretold` not `fortold` I see nothing wrong with this whatsoever. Bloody brill'! __________________ Like the universe sitting on your face. Plugged into Gaia's Brain, in a Wyrddripping Cavernous Labyrinth. Following the string of Semi - Madness, Brain Gymnastics, Sonic Elastics, Frying the Mind Circuits!

05-02-2006, 04:24 AM	#2 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	i think this is good, probably one of your best so far!

05-03-2006, 09:41 AM	#4 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	Thank you guys for the comments. And thank you Nikie for noticing that, never knew there was a E in it