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04-28-2006, 03:04 PM
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that's my war face.
Join Date: Nov 2005
Posts: 1,418
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And then the fire burns out
May you make amends
we're dying to carry on Can't we all be friends It's been so very long And then the fire burns out and the smoke settles down and we're back to where we started with a plastic smile and a frown Trust me it's the truth everything I have said I put it down to youth Whirlwinds in our heads And then the fire burns out and the smoke settles down and we're back to where we started with a plastic smile and a frown And then the fire-it burns out rain drops split up shouts and we're taken back again and I'm forced to defend her I've heard it all before but this time I am shaking maybe this means so much more why is my heart breaking? And then the fire burns out and the smoke settles down and we're back to where we started with a plastic smile and a frown and then the fire-it burns out rain drops split up shouts and we're taken back again and I'm forced to defend her... |
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04-28-2006, 06:09 PM
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isfckingdead
Join Date: Nov 2004
Posts: 18,967
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I like it, but I think it would be better if you dropped all the ands at the start of each line. Just my opinion though.
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