Alive
 

Alive

I've washed my conscience down the drain
But know I’ll never be the same
Dragged you through my house
A total stranger
Make you wish you hadn’t come
Never gonna make it home

Alive
Alive
Alive
Goodnight

You'll beg me to let you go but
I'm not that bright and not that slow
So shut up and stay quiet
I still haven't decided
What I will do
Make your worst nightmares come true

Alive
Alive
Alive
Goodnight

Chorus is awful and so is the You'll beg me to let you go but I'm not that bright and not that slow line.

Nothing flows for me, rewrite it with different syllable counts or trash it.

Yeh I Agree ^:love:

i'll leave it the way it is! thanx for the comments

Np Thats What Where Hear For Good Luck On Writing More In Future

thanx smoggey, well swim and hobo don't get the point of the song/poem so i couldn't be bothered explaining it. if they were that good they would get the point and the style of the writing.

Yeh Hmm Maybe Explain Next Time ?

well i think that i shouldn't have to it's not that hard to see what it's about and the style of writing i'm going for!

Yeh I Agree . But Some People See Things Differnt In Many Ways ? Like Look At Some Lyrics People Dont Get Them At All And Some People Do ! ! !