Aint home yet

either/or · 04-18-2006, 03:27 AM

mm i see what you mean. what do you suggest then , line or word or something. i was originally trying to think like harmony or note but it didnt work out.

blackTshirt · 04-18-2006, 03:43 AM

how about part?

DontRunMeOver · 04-18-2006, 04:18 AM

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Originally Posted by either/or

mm i see what you mean. what do you suggest then , line or word or something. i was originally trying to think like harmony or note but it didnt work out.

I would suggest 'phrase', 'word', 'note' or something along those lines. Its about pieces missing from the song which is being sung to you, so one of these words would be best, as they directly relate to the vocal melody of a song. Think about what you want to say is missing and then use the correct word!

either/or · 04-18-2006, 04:43 AM

yeah ithink ill change it to word. thanks for the help. and im gonna record it soon and stick on myspace.

TrampInaTux · 04-18-2006, 02:40 PM

****ing.

Brilliant.

One of the best works I've seen. This is how you do it, people. I hate to say it but I feel the 'ain't home yet' but at the end of each line doesn't fit in, at least when I read it. It probably does the way you've got it worked, but to me it seems a little bit fiddly.

either/or · 04-19-2006, 12:58 AM

thanks hobo man much appreciated.

sleepy jack · 04-19-2006, 01:27 PM

I don't have much to add but I liked it.

04-18-2006, 03:27 AM	#11 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	mm i see what you mean. what do you suggest then , line or word or something. i was originally trying to think like harmony or note but it didnt work out. __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

04-18-2006, 03:43 AM	#12 (permalink)
blackTshirt The Randomness Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: romania.. shut up Posts: 854	how about part? __________________ My rims never spin, to the contrary You'll find that they're quite stationary.

04-18-2006, 04:43 AM	#14 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	yeah ithink ill change it to word. thanks for the help. and im gonna record it soon and stick on myspace. __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

04-19-2006, 12:58 AM	#16 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	thanks hobo man much appreciated. __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

04-18-2006, 02:40 PM	#15 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	****ing. Brilliant. One of the best works I've seen. This is how you do it, people. I hate to say it but I feel the 'ain't home yet' but at the end of each line doesn't fit in, at least when I read it. It probably does the way you've got it worked, but to me it seems a little bit fiddly.

04-19-2006, 01:27 PM	#17 (permalink)
sleepy jack isfckingdead Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 18,967	I don't have much to add but I liked it.