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They call me Tundra Boy
Join Date: Sep 2005
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That's the main thing you should change, there are other lines which could use work, for example: Quote:
2. It looks like it'll be too long to fit into a good melody. Of course, this depends on the music but even if it does fit in its current form you might find it'll sound better if you shorten it, make it punchier. There must be other lines, but once again I don't have time to go into it more. |
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